Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and articles), fluency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, use articles ('a bike'), correct verb forms ('didn't have', 'couldn't afford'), avoid repetition, and add one brief supporting detail. Keep answer under five sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my mother couldn't afford one. However, I sometimes borrowed a neighbour's bike to ride to the park, which was a great way to practice balancing and have fun.

提案: Improve grammar (verb forms, prepositions), remove repetition, and make supporting details more specific and coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'for example.' Use correct verb forms ('use', 'go to school or work') and clearer phrasing ('help people avoid being late').

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to go to school and work. For example, commuters often cycle during rush hour to avoid traffic and arrive on time, and students commonly ride bikes to save money on transportation.

× I don't have bike when I was a child because my my mother can't afford it.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my mother couldn't afford one.

Errors: tense inconsistency, article missing, incorrect modal tense, repetition. 'I don't have' is present tense but context is past — use past 'I didn't have'. 'bike' needs the indefinite article 'a'. 'my my' is duplication; remove one. 'can't afford it' should be past 'couldn't afford one' to match past timeframe; use 'one' to avoid repeating 'bike'. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout the sentence for past situations, include articles before singular countable nouns, and avoid duplicate words.

× Yes, bikes are popular in in our country because so many people using bike going to the school by work and useful to avoid late in their own places.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because so many people use bikes to go to school or work, and they are useful for avoiding being late.

Multiple errors: repeated word 'in in' remove duplicate. 'so many people using bike' is missing auxiliary and wrong verb form — use present simple 'use bikes'. 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match 'so many people'. 'going to the school by work' is incorrect preposition and article — use 'to go to school or work'. 'useful to avoid late in their own places' is ungrammatical; use 'useful for avoiding being late' or 'help avoid being late'. Suggestion: Use present simple for general truths, match plural nouns with plural verbs, use correct prepositions ('to school', 'to work'), and use clear gerund or infinitive forms for purpose ('to go', 'for avoiding').