Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise, avoid unnecessary formality, and add a brief specific detail to enrich the answer. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then use one supporting detail linked with a connector.

例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bright red bike for my tenth birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend.

提案: Make the answer more natural by removing extra words and improving grammar. Use linking words to add a specific reason or example, and avoid vague phrases like "professional as well as their personal use."

例: Yes, bikes are very popular. They are cheap and convenient, so many people use them for commuting; for example, office workers and students often ride bikes to save money and avoid traffic.

× Yes Sir, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes Sir, I had a bike when I was a child.

No correction needed for this sentence; articles are used correctly. It is retained to show no article error present.

× It was given by my parents as a birthday gift.

✓ It was given to me by my parents as a birthday gift.

The original sentence uses 'given by my parents' which is grammatically acceptable but omits the indirect object 'to me' for clarity. Using 'given to me by my parents' clearly indicates the receiver of the gift. Suggestion: include the indirect object or rephrase with 'received' if preferred.

× Yes, I believe that the bikes are very popular in my country because it is very convenient and cheap.

✓ Yes, I believe that bikes are very popular in my country because they are very convenient and cheap.

Incorrect use of the definite article 'the' before 'bikes' makes the phrase sound like a specific group rather than bikes in general. Also, the pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers back to plural 'bikes' and should be 'they'. Suggestion: remove 'the' and use plural pronoun agreement ('they are').

× People can easily purchase bike for the professional as well as their personal use.

✓ People can easily purchase bikes for professional as well as personal use.

There is a singular/plural mismatch: 'purchase bike' should be 'purchase bikes' when speaking generally. Also 'the professional' is incorrect; use 'professional' as an adjective without 'the'. 'Their personal use' can be shortened to 'personal use' to avoid pronoun redundancy. Suggestion: use plural noun 'bikes' and adjective forms 'professional'/'personal'.