Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammar errors. Give a direct topic sentence and one or two supporting details (age, how you used the bike, a brief memory). Keep it natural and concise, avoid repetition, and use linking words if you add details.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I started riding it when I was about seven, and I often rode around my neighborhood with friends at weekends. Because I practiced a lot, I became quite confident riding on busy streets.

提案: Your answer answers the question but is vague and repetitive. State a clear opinion, then give specific supporting details (where you see bikes, who uses them, reasons for popularity). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and avoid repeating phrases.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, when I go to the park or commute to work I often see people of all ages cycling, and many cities have dedicated bike lanes, which encourages cycling as a cheap and healthy transportation option.

× Yes. The child, this my child is, uh, to my choice. Your years, years, years, whole 17, yeah.

✓ Yes. This was my bike of choice when I was a child. I had it for about 17 years.

The original contains unclear word order and missing/incorrect verbs and articles, making it a sentence structure error. Rearranged clauses into a clear subject-verb-object order and supplied a past-tense verb 'was' to match the past-time context. Also replaced vague fragments with a clear duration phrase 'for about 17 years.' Suggestion: form a complete sentence with a clear subject and past-tense verb when talking about past possession. Please note: the correction only addresses sentence-structure problems per the provided list.

× Yes, because every day and every day I go to park, I see anyone to. Like cycling so for me. Yeah.

✓ Yes. Every day when I go to the park, I see many people cycling, so I think bikes are popular.

The original misuses pronouns ('anyone to' is incorrect) and has missing articles and awkward fragments. Replaced 'anyone to' with 'many people' (correct pronoun/quantifier phrase) and added the definite article 'the' before 'park.' Combined fragments into a single coherent sentence that fits the present-tense habitual context. Suggestion: use appropriate pronouns or quantifiers (someone/anyone/many people) and include articles ('the park') when referring to specific places.