Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use correct tense and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid absolute statements like "the happiest moment" without brief context.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. For example, I used to ride it with my parents every weekend, and we often went to the nearby park, which made those weekends really special.

提案: Be concise and use more natural phrasing and linking words. State your opinion, then give specific reasons or examples with clear connectors (e.g., "because", "for example"). Use correct word forms ("available to rent").

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because there are many bike-sharing schemes available to rent. For example, in my city you can easily hire a bike via an app, which makes short trips convenient and affordable.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child and I enjoyed riding a bike with my family.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I enjoyed riding it with my family.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past simple 'had' to match the past time. Also replace the repeated noun 'a bike' with the pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for events in childhood and use pronouns to avoid repetition.

× It's the happiest moment in my childhood.

✓ It was the happiest time of my childhood.

The clause refers to a past period, so use past tense 'was' not present 'is'. 'Moment' can be used but 'time' fits better with 'childhood'; also use 'of my childhood' rather than 'in'. Suggestion: use past tense and natural collocations: 'the happiest time of my childhood.'

× Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for affirmative present simple statements when not used for emphasis or questions. Removing 'do' makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: use 'I think' for normal statements rather than 'I do think' unless stressing agreement.

× It's because there are a lot of bikes that are opened to rent for people who would like to ride bikes and it's very convenient.

✓ It's because there are a lot of bikes available to rent for people who would like to ride, and it's very convenient.

'Opened to rent' is incorrect; use 'available to rent' or 'open for rent'. Also 'ride bikes' is repetitive; simply 'ride' is enough. The sentence also benefits from a comma before the conjunction 'and'. Suggestion: use 'available to rent' and avoid repeating nouns unnecessarily.