Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Start with a direct response (yes/no), then add one or two clear supporting sentences with specific details. Keep it natural and under five sentences. Use linking words like “when” or “because” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day to visit my friends and to go to the local park. Because the roads were quiet in my neighborhood, I felt safe practicing new tricks.

提案: The answer is confusing and contains unrelated phrases. Begin with a clear opinion (Yes/No) and then give specific reasons and examples. Use linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “therefore.” Keep to two or three coherent sentences and avoid irrelevant expressions.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to travel to work or to market stalls where public transport is limited. Therefore, cycling is an important part of daily life for many families.

× To have a bike when you were a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

ID 26: The student responded with a fragment that repeats the question structure instead of giving a complete answer. The sentence 'To have a bike when you were a child.' is an infinitive phrase, not a past-tense statement. The correct response should use past tense and a subject: 'I had a bike when I was a child.' Suggestion: Use a full clause with subject + past-tense verb to answer questions about the past (subject 'I' + past verb 'had').

× However, yes, bikes are actually on the way my country because many people use it as a paid phone before they have transportation.

✓ Yes, bikes are actually becoming more common in my country because many people use them as an inexpensive way to travel before they have other transportation.

ID 26 and ID 11: The original sentence has multiple problems: incorrect phrase 'on the way my country' and wrong noun phrase 'paid phone' that do not make sense in context. It also has pronoun agreement ('people... use it' should be 'use them'). The corrected sentence uses a clear verb phrase 'becoming more common' to express increasing popularity, fixes prepositional use ('in my country'), replaces 'paid phone' with 'inexpensive way to travel' which matches intended meaning, and corrects pronoun agreement ('them' for bikes). Suggestion: Express increases with verbs like 'becoming' or 'are becoming', use correct prepositions ('in my country'), and ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents.

× Welcome to some appointments we have to say how stuff with reaching doctors in mind.

✓ We have to make appointments and plan how to reach doctors when necessary.

ID 12 and ID 26: The original is unclear and contains incorrect word choices ('Welcome to some appointments', 'say how stuff with reaching doctors in mind'). The corrected sentence clarifies the intended meaning: arranging appointments and planning access to doctors. It fixes pronoun/word use and turns fragments into a coherent clause. Suggestion: Use clear verbs ('make appointments', 'plan how to reach') and keep related ideas in one coherent sentence to convey meaning.