Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be slightly more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail (reason or memory). Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences. Use a linking word if you add extra information.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. Instead, I usually walked to school or took the bus because my family lived close to the school.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then two concise supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (verb tenses, articles) and avoid fillers. Be specific about infrastructure issues and safety concerns. Keep it coherent and under five sentences.

例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. Mainly, this is because there are few dedicated bike lanes, so cycling on busy roads feels unsafe. As a result, most people prefer public transport or taxis for daily commuting.

× No, bikes weren't popular.

✓ No, bikes aren't very popular.

The student is responding about the current popularity of bikes in their country. Using the past tense 'weren't' conflicts with the following present-tense explanation. Change to present tense 'aren't' to match the intended meaning and maintain tense consistency.

× Bikes aren't popular in my country mainly because of the infrastructure.

✓ Bikes aren't popular in my country mainly because of the poor infrastructure.

The original sentence is mostly correct grammatically, but adding an adjective like 'poor' clarifies the meaning. Ensure present tense is used consistently when discussing current situations.

× We normally rely on public transportation and taxis when we commute.

✓ We normally rely on public transportation and taxis when we commute.

This sentence is grammatically correct and already uses the appropriate present tense for habitual actions. No change needed; keep as is.

× Umm, so it is also considered quite dangerous.

✓ Umm, so cycling is also considered quite dangerous.

The pronoun 'it' is vague here. Specify the subject 'cycling' to make the sentence clear and maintain coherence with previous sentences.

× Uh, because there were any bike lanes and uh, most of the cars just drive with a full.

✓ Uh, because there aren't any bike lanes, and most of the cars just drive very fast.

Multiple issues: 'there were any bike lanes' incorrectly uses past tense and 'were' with 'any'; use present 'aren't any' to match current situation (There be issue and tense). Also 'drive with a full' is incorrect collocation; likely intended 'drive very fast.' Replace with 'drive very fast' to use a correct adverbial phrase. Finally, add a comma and conjunction to join clauses smoothly.