Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and add one clear supporting detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating "I think," fix errors ("too big for me"), and give a brief reason using a linking word (e.g., "so").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I didn’t like it because it was too big for me, so I usually walked or took the bus to school.

提案: Give a clear direct answer (Yes/No), avoid fillers, correct grammar (e.g., "many people go to school or work by bike"), and use a linking word to add a specific supporting detail such as an example or reason. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people go to school or work by bike; for example, commuters in my city often use bicycles to avoid traffic and save money.

× Of course I had a bike when I was a child, but I didn't really like it because I think it's too big to for me and I think I preferred walking or taking a bus to go to school.

✓ Of course I had a bike when I was a child, but I didn't really like it because I thought it was too big for me and I preferred walking or taking a bus to go to school.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The actions and opinions refer to the past, so verbs should be in past tense: 'think' -> 'thought' and 'is' -> 'was'. Also 'too big to for me' has an extra preposition; correct form is 'too big for me'. Use consistent past tense when describing past situations to avoid tense inconsistency and confusion.

× Maybe, yes, uh, in my life there is so many people by, uh, by go to school or go to work by bike and uh, so many people likes uh, bicycling in their daily life and umm.

✓ Maybe, yes, in my area there are so many people who go to school or go to work by bike, and many people like bicycling in their daily lives.

Multiple errors: 'in my life' is incorrect contextually; 'in my area' or 'in my city' fits better. 'There is so many people' is wrong: use plural verb 'there are' for plural noun (subject-verb agreement). 'by go to school' is incorrect verb form and preposition use; correct: 'who go... by bike'. 'Likes' should be 'like' to agree with plural 'people'. 'Daily life' should be plural 'daily lives' when referring to many people. Corrections fix preposition and agreement errors and improve clarity.