Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more grammatically correct, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and possessive forms, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary words and repetition.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child that stayed at my grandmother’s house. I visited her every week, so I often rode the bike there; I especially enjoyed riding with the small basket attached to the front. It was one of my favorite childhood toys.

提案: Provide a clearer opinion statement followed by specific observations and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct grammar (word order, tense, plural forms) and avoid repeating 'sometimes'. Give a short comparison or reason to support your view.

例: I think bicycles are moderately popular in my country. For example, I often see students and some commuters cycling to school or work, especially in quieter neighborhoods; however, many people prefer buses or cars because of long distances and busy roads.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' is present tense; change to 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past simple when referring to possessions in the past (I had a bike).

× When I was a child it was in my grandmother home and I visited her every week can and I play with my basket, my bike with her.

✓ When I was a child it was at my grandmother's house and I visited her every week, and I played with my bike and its basket with her.

Multiple errors: use 'at' with locations like 'grandmother's house' and add possessive 'grandmother's'. The sentence mixes tenses and has extra words ('can'). Use past tense 'played' to match 'When I was a child'. Also 'my bike with her' is unclear; 'my bike and its basket with her' clarifies that both were played with. Suggestions: split into shorter clauses, use possessive forms, correct preposition 'at', and keep consistent past tense. Note: This correction addresses preposition use and related tense/possession issues per the allowed list.

× I'm not sure bicycle on popular in my country, but I do see some people ride their bike to school or to work sometimes and sometimes some people used transportation to go to work.

✓ I'm not sure bicycles are popular in my country, but I do see some people ride their bikes to school or to work sometimes, and some people use public transportation to go to work.

Errors fixed: 'bicycle on popular' is incorrect word order and preposition use; use plural 'bicycles' and 'are popular' for present general statement. Maintain present tense 'use' instead of past 'used' because it's a habitual action. Also pluralize 'bike' to match 'some people' and replace 'transportation' with 'public transportation' for clarity. Suggestions: use subject-verb agreement with plural nouns, keep consistent present tense for habitual actions, and use natural collocations like 'are popular' and 'use public transportation'.