Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, with an effective topic sentence and additional details. To improve, make the response more concise (max 5 sentences), reduce redundancy, and add a brief reason or feeling to make it more specific. Use a linking word to connect the background with the conclusion (e.g., "however" or "but"). Also correct small phrasing issues (e.g., "how to use it" -> "how to ride it").

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Although my family could have afforded one and my uncle taught me how to ride every day, I still never managed to learn it properly. As a result, I always walked or took the bus to school, which was a bit inconvenient.

提案: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives a relevant recent example. To improve, avoid filler words like "uh," be more precise (avoid vague phrases like "most of the people"), and expand slightly with a linking word and a specific reason or effect (e.g., "because" or "so"). Keep it concise and natural.

例: Yes, bikes have become quite popular in my country. During the pandemic many people switched from cars to bicycles because they wanted exercise and safer, less crowded travel, so cycling infrastructure and bike sales increased.

× During the pandemic, uh, most of the people switched from using their cars to bicycles as their means of their transportation when going to work at other places.

✓ During the pandemic, most people switched from using their cars to bicycles as their means of transportation when going to work.

The original sentence has unnecessary article use and awkward phrasing, not a true third person singular verb error; however it contains problems that match 'Incorrect use of pronouns' and 'Article errors'. I corrected phrasing to remove 'the' before 'people' (unnecessary article) and 'their' before 'transportation' (redundant). I also simplified 'when going to work at other places' to 'when going to work' for naturalness. Suggestion: avoid redundant articles and possessive pronouns and use concise expressions (e.g., 'most people', 'means of transportation').

× During the pandemic, uh, most of the people switched from using their cars to bicycles as their means of their transportation when going to work at other places.

✓ During the pandemic, most people switched from using their cars to bicycles as their means of transportation when going to work.

The phrase 'most of the people' is wordy; use 'most people'. The phrase 'their means of their transportation' repeats the possessive pronoun unnecessarily. Also 'at other places' is vague and unidiomatic. I removed redundancy and tightened the sentence. Suggestion: eliminate repeated possessives and unnecessary modifiers, and prefer concise, idiomatic phrases.