Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and word choice, and keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' correctly, and provide a specific detail or short reason. For example, correct mistakes: 'could have afforded one' instead of 'could have upward one', 'they used a tricycle to take me to school' instead of 'they use a tricycle as my service'.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Although my family could have afforded one, I never really learned to ride, so they used a tricycle to take me to school every day. I felt safe on the tricycle, and it was more practical for short trips around our neighborhood.

提案: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a clear reason and a specific example. Correct phrases such as 'specially' → 'especially', remove unnecessary words like 'where in', and use correct verb forms: 'people switched' not 'switches'. Use linking words like 'because' or 'during' to connect ideas.

例: Yes, bikes have become quite popular in my country, especially during the pandemic. Many people switched from cars to bicycles because they wanted to avoid crowded public transport, and cities even added more bike lanes to support this change.

× Although my family could have upward one.

✓ Although my family could have afforded one.

The original sentence uses 'upward' incorrectly. The intended meaning is that the family had the financial ability to buy a bike; the correct verb phrase is 'could have afforded one.' Use 'afforded' (past participle) with 'could have' to express possibility in the past. Suggestion: use 'could have afforded one' to clearly express past ability to pay.

× I never really learned how to ride a bike, so instead they use a tricycle as my service to take me to school every day.

✓ I never really learned how to ride a bike, so instead they used a tricycle to take me to school every day.

The sentence mixes past and present: 'never really learned' is past, so the following clause should also be past ('used' not 'use'). 'As my service' is awkward and unnecessary; 'to take me to school' expresses purpose clearly. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and remove redundant phrases.

× Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in our country, specially during the pandemic where in the people switches from using their cars through bicycles as their means of transportation.

✓ Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in our country, especially during the pandemic, when people switched from using their cars to bicycles as their means of transportation.

Multiple issues: 'specially' should be 'especially' (correct adverb). 'Where in' is incorrect in this context; 'when' is appropriate for time. 'The people switches' has subject-verb disagreement and unnecessary 'the'; use 'people switched' (past) to match 'during the pandemic.' 'From using their cars through bicycles' is wrong preposition choice; use 'to bicycles.' Suggestion: use 'especially,' use 'when' for time clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'to' for change from one option to another.

× Did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

This sentence is already correct. The singular 'a bike' matches the question context. No change needed.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically correct: negative past simple 'didn't have' correctly matches the time reference 'when I was a child.' No change needed.