Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and personal, but it could be more concise and better structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid unnecessary words like “literally” unless it adds meaning, and watch capitalization (e.g., “big brother” should be lowercased unless it’s a name).

例: Yes, I did — it was a pink bicycle. I rode it every day around my neighborhood, and my older brother taught me to balance and pedal. Because of that practice, I became confident riding on busy streets by the time I was ten.

提案: The answer addresses the question but is disfluent and unfinished. Make a direct topic sentence, then give two clear reasons with linking words and specific examples. Avoid repetition (e.g., “they they”) and finish your thought. Use vocabulary like “environmentally friendly” and “cost-effective.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are environmentally friendly and much more cost-effective than cars. For example, many commuters choose bicycles for short trips to avoid traffic and save money on fuel and parking.

× My Big Brother taught me how to ride a bike when I was little.

✓ My big brother taught me how to ride a bike when I was little.

The phrase 'Big Brother' capitalizes 'Big' unnecessarily, making it look like a proper noun; this is not a grammar rule from the provided list but is a capitalization issue. However, within provided categories the sentence is otherwise grammatically correct (past tense verb 'taught' agrees with the subject). Suggestion: use lowercase for family role unless it is used as a name: 'my big brother'.

× That's a good question. Yes, they are because the people in my country, they see that bikes are healthier for the environment and they they are cheaper than cars.

✓ That's a good question. Yes, they are, because people in my country see that bikes are healthier for the environment and cheaper than cars.

The original sentence has a redundant pronoun 'they' after 'the people in my country,' and repeats 'they' twice ('they they are cheaper'). This is an incorrect use/repetition of pronouns. Remove the redundant 'they' and the second 'they' and streamline the clause. Also remove the definite article 'the' before 'people' for natural generalization. Keep present simple 'are' to match the general statement.

× So there are more economical and.

✓ So they are also more economical.

The sentence fragment 'So there are more economical and.' is incomplete—lacking the noun or adjective complement and proper subject. This is a sentence structure error. Correct by supplying the subject 'they' (referring to bikes) and completing the comparative adjective with an adverb 'also' for flow: 'So they are also more economical.' Alternatively: 'So they are more economical.'