Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details (when you got it, who gave it, a memory) using linking words. Keep answers natural, use correct tense and pronouns, and avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases. Aim for 2–4 sentences and correct collocations (e.g., “when I was a child,” “my mother bought/gave me”).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my eighth birthday, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood every afternoon. I remember racing with other kids and learning to ride without training wheels within a few weeks.

提案: Answer directly, then support with concise specific reasons and linking words. Use correct singular/plural and collocations (e.g., “a main form of transportation,” “many people use bikes because…”). Provide one or two clear reasons or examples (environment, cost, traffic) to make your response more informative and coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them because they are cheap and convenient for short trips, and they help avoid traffic congestion. For example, students and market vendors often cycle to work or school every day.

× Yes, as far as you can remember, I had one when I was in there. My mom loved me once and I was in the House of other kids outside.

✓ Yes, as far as I can remember, I had one when I was there. My mother loved me and I used to play with other kids outside.

Pronoun and reference errors: 'as far as you can remember' incorrectly addresses the examiner; it should be 'I'. 'in there' is unnatural and unnecessary—use 'there'. 'My mom loved me once' is incorrect tense and meaning; likely intended to say mother cared for me while I played, so 'My mother loved me' is fine but 'once' is wrong; removed. 'I was in the House of other kids outside' is ungrammatical and misuses articles and prepositions; corrected to 'I used to play with other kids outside' to convey habitual past action. Suggestions: use correct subject pronoun matching the speaker ('I'), avoid redundant prepositions, replace vague/time words like 'once' when incorrect, and use clear verbs for habitual past ('used to').

× Absolutely, yes, it is one of the main source or main transportation here in our country.

✓ Absolutely. Yes, they are one of the main sources of transportation in our country.

Subject-verb agreement and number: 'it is one of the main source' is incorrect because 'one of the' requires a plural noun ('sources'). Also 'main transportation' is count/uncount issue; better to say 'sources of transportation'. If referring to 'bikes' (plural subject), use 'they are' instead of 'it is'. Suggestions: identify the subject (bikes → they), ensure verb agrees in number, and use plural noun after 'one of the'.