Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly answers the question, but it has hesitations and small repetition (“I did” twice). To improve, make a single concise topic sentence, avoid filler words (like “umm”), and add one short supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., “and” or “then”) to make the sequence clearer. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I had two bikes as a child. The first was a small tricycle I got at five, and then at ten I received a larger bicycle with training wheels. I used them mostly to ride around the neighborhood with friends.

提案: Your response addresses the question and gives reasons, but it contains repetition, awkward phrasing and lacks clear linking. To improve, begin with a direct topic sentence, use linking words (such as “because” and “however”), give more specific examples or comparisons, and avoid repeating phrases. Break into two short sentences for clarity and keep vocabulary simple and relevant.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many children ride them in the afternoons and families often use them for short trips. However, as people grow older they usually switch to motorcycles or cars for convenience.

× I did have two bikes. One was when I was 5 and then I got another one when I was umm, 10 years old.

✓ I had two bikes. One was when I was five, and then I got another when I was ten years old.

Use consistent noun forms and natural phrasing: 'I did have two bikes' is grammatically possible but unnatural here; simple past 'I had' fits better (presented under singular/plural because 'one' and 'another' should pair clearly with 'bike(s)'). Also write numbers as words in formal speech transcripts and remove the extra 'one' after 'another' which is optional. Use a comma before 'and then' only if linking clauses. Suggestion: Use 'I had two bikes' and 'another' without repeating 'one' for conciseness.

× Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because some children would play bicycles in the afternoon and then some do have do have it as a hobby but as people got older they prefer to use a motorcycle.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because some children ride bicycles in the afternoon and some take it up as a hobby, but as people get older they prefer to use motorcycles.

Multiple issues: 'play bicycles' is incorrect verb choice; the correct verb is 'ride bicycles' ('play' with bicycle is wrong). The phrase 'do have do have it as a hobby' repeats and uses wrong pronoun 'it' for plural 'bikes' and wrong verb. 'Take up as a hobby' is natural. Tense consistency: use present tense 'get older' to match 'prefer'. Also 'motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles' to match general reference. Mapped to subject-verb/agreement and verb choice errors; suggestion: use 'ride', 'take it up as a hobby', keep present tense for general statements, and make nouns plural when speaking generally.