Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify tense and meaning, use a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did. I loved riding bikes as a child because they were my main way to get around the neighborhood. My father bought one for me when I was nine, and I used it to go to school and play with friends on weekends.

提案: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence, then add one or two specific reasons and a linking word (e.g., “because,” “however,” “for example”). Use natural phrasing and a wider range of vocabulary.

例: Not really. Cars are much more popular in my country because many people prefer the convenience and comfort they offer. For example, long distances between cities and limited bike lanes make driving more practical for most families.

× I really like buy 2 every everywhere and.

✓ I really like buying two everywhere.

The verb 'like' should be followed by a gerund (verb + -ing) when describing general preferences: 'like buying'. Use 'two' instead of digit '2' in formal writing and remove 'everywhere and' which is ungrammatical; 'everywhere' alone conveys the meaning. Also keep sentence concise: 'I really like buying two everywhere' (though contextually odd, it follows grammatical rules).

× There's my father to brought to me when I have 99 school in mathematics.

✓ My father brought it to me when I was in grade 9 in mathematics class.

Multiple errors: 'There's' is incorrect here (there is indicates existence) so replace with subject 'My father'. 'to brought' is wrong form—use past simple 'brought'. 'to me' follows correctly after 'brought'. 'when I have 99 school' is ungrammatical: likely intended 'when I was in 9th grade' or 'grade 9'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'brought'. Specify 'mathematics class' for clarity. Also use 'it' to refer to the bike mentioned earlier (correct pronoun).

× Not really, my country is more to drive the car.

✓ Not really. In my country, people prefer to drive cars.

The original mixes structures and uses 'is more to drive the car' which is ungrammatical. Use present simple to state general preference: 'people prefer to drive cars.' Insert 'In my country' for clarity and use the plural 'cars' for general statements. This fixes subject and verb structure and uses correct collocation 'prefer to'.