Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời đã trả lời trực tiếp nhưng còn một số điểm cần cải thiện: (1) Ngữ pháp: câu “about few years ago” sai cấu trúc, nên là “a few years ago” hoặc “about X years ago”. (2) Tự nhiên và mạch lạc: tránh lặp từ (“used to” xuất hiện hai lần gần nhau) và tách ý thành câu chủ đề + chi tiết hỗ trợ ngắn gọn. (3) Liên kết và độ chính xác: thêm từ nối để làm rõ thời gian và kết quả, đồng thời giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu. (4) Từ vựng: dùng từ phong phú hơn (“pink bike” ok nhưng có thể mô tả thêm sơ lược như “small” hoặc “with a basket”) để cụ thể hóa.

例: Yes, I had a small pink bike when I was a child. I often rode it to school every day, and it even had a little basket on the front. Unfortunately, it broke down a few years ago and we never got it repaired.

提案: Câu trả lời nêu được ý chính nhưng cần cải thiện: (1) Tính mạch lạc: tránh tiếng lắp (“umm”, “uh”, “Enjoy”) và kết hợp câu rời rạc thành một câu mạch lạc bằng liên từ. (2) Cụ thể hóa: nêu ví dụ hoặc số liệu, hoặc giải thích nguyên nhân và hệ quả ngắn gọn (ví dụ: giao thông, thu nhập, xe điện). (3) Ngữ pháp: tránh lặp “used to” khi không cần, dùng thì rõ ràng. (4) Độ dài: giữ trong tối đa 5 câu, mỗi câu rõ ràng.

例: Bicycles were very common in my country a decade ago, but their use has declined recently due to the rise of motorbikes and electric scooters. Nowadays, mainly children and older people still ride bikes for short trips or exercise. Additionally, improved public transport and higher incomes make motorized transport more convenient for most people.

× It is a pink bike which I used for going to school when I was little, but unfortunately it broke down about few years ago.

✓ It was a pink bike which I used to go to school on when I was little, but unfortunately it broke down a few years ago.

The sentence mixes present and past tense: 'It is a pink bike' conflicts with the past context. Use past tense 'was'. 'Used for going' is awkward; after 'used to' the base form of the verb is needed for habitual past (used to go). Also say 'go to school on' for correct preposition with 'bike'. 'About few years ago' is missing an article; use 'a few years ago'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past) and use 'used to + base verb' for past habits, use 'a few' for quantity and 'on' with vehicle.

× It used to be very common to use bikes in my country a few years ago, but with the rapid development and more electric vehicles becoming available, they are rarely used now.

✓ Bikes used to be very common in my country a few years ago, but with rapid development and more electric vehicles becoming available, they are rarely used now.

Word order and subject clarity: 'It used to be very common to use bikes' is awkward. Better: 'Bikes used to be very common'. Also remove the article 'the' before 'rapid development' for general reference. Keep tense consistent: 'used to' for past habit and 'are rarely used now' for present passive. Suggestion: place the subject 'bikes' before 'used to' for clearer, more natural phrasing.

× Mostly umm, children and older people. Enjoy uh.

✓ Mostly, bikes are used by children and older people nowadays.

The original is a sentence fragment and contains filler words. There is no verb in 'Mostly umm, children and older people.' and 'Enjoy uh.' is not appropriate. Correct by making a full sentence with subject and verb: 'Bikes are used by children and older people.' Add 'nowadays' or 'now' to match context. Remove fillers and ensure proper sentence structure.