Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer does not address the question and is unclear. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question (yes/no) and then briefly add one or two specific supporting details. Keep it natural and concise, use linking words if you add details, and avoid irrelevant or incomplete replies.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I received it as a birthday present when I was eight and used it to ride to my friend’s house every weekend.

提案: Your answer attempts to respond but is disorganized and contains grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give one or two specific reasons or examples, using linking words (for example, because, so, and) to make the answer coherent. Use more precise vocabulary (commuting, recreation) and avoid filler phrases like "and stuff like that." Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for commuting because traffic is heavy and bike lanes are widely available. For example, I see dozens of cyclists in the park and along the main roads during rush hour.

× And I'm a child.

✓ No, I was a child.

The student answered the examiner's past-tense question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' with 'And I'm a child.' which incorrectly uses present tense and the pronoun 'I' with 'am'. This is an incorrect response rather than a direct grammar form error; it fails to match the past-time reference. According to the provided list, this fits 'Incorrect use of pronouns' because the pronoun and auxiliary combination is inappropriate for the context. Correct it to 'No, I was a child.' or better, 'Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.' depending on intended meaning. Suggestion: match the tense of the question (use past tense 'was' and 'had') and answer directly. Note: If the student meant to say they are currently a child, rephrase to 'No, I am a child.' but that would not answer the examiner's question about the past.

× Just parks are very popular in my country every day lots of people using bikes to get to their work or some enjoying the riding the bikes and stuff like that.

✓ In my country, bicycles are very popular; every day many people use bikes to get to work, and some people enjoy riding them.

The original sentence has multiple grammar problems: missing articles, incorrect preposition phrase 'get to their work' (better 'get to work'), gerund/participle usage 'lots of people using' without a finite verb, and awkward noun phrases 'enjoying the riding the bikes'. Per the provided list, the primary issues are 'Incorrect use of prepositions' (ID 11) for 'get to their work' and also 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26) and 'Incorrect use of pronouns' for 'the bikes' vs 'them'. The corrected sentence fixes preposition use ('get to work'), supplies proper verbs ('many people use'), removes redundant articles, and replaces 'the bikes' with the pronoun 'them'. Suggestions: 1) Use a finite verb after time phrases ('every day many people use bikes'), 2) Use 'get to work' not 'get to their work', 3) Use 'enjoy riding them' rather than 'enjoying the riding the bikes'.