Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn cần trả lời trực tiếp vào câu hỏi và dùng thì quá khứ cho hành động trong quá khứ. Tránh lỗi từ vựng (bike vs bag) và giảm lặp từ. Hãy nói 1 câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: ai tặng, khi nào, bạn dùng nó như thế nào). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản nếu cần để làm rõ nguyên nhân hoặc kết quả.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike when I was about eight; my parents bought it for me as a birthday present. I rode it every day around the neighborhood, and it quickly became my favorite way to play and travel short distances.

提案: Bạn nên dùng từ vựng chính xác (bike, not bag) và tránh nhiều tiếng ừ/hành động sửa lời. Trả lời trực tiếp, rồi cung cấp 1–2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ như "because" hoặc "because of" và ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: ai dùng, ở đâu, vì lý do gì). Giữ mỗi câu ngắn gọn và rõ ràng.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting in busy neighborhoods. For example, students and shopkeepers often ride bikes to save money and avoid traffic during rush hour.

× Yes, I want to.

✓ Yes, I wanted to.

The student is answering a past-tense question (Did you have a bike when you were a child?), so the verb should be in the past simple. 'Want' in present tense is incorrect for a past context; use 'wanted' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: use past simple verbs when referring to past situations (e.g., 'I wanted a bike').

× I want a bag when I was a child because that that is my dream when I cheered.

✓ I wanted a bike when I was a child because that was my dream when I was happy.

Multiple problems: mismatch of items ('bag' vs 'bike') and tense inconsistency ('want' with past time 'when I was a child'). The phrase 'that that' is a repetition error. 'When I cheered' is unclear and likely incorrect word choice; possibly the student meant 'when I was excited' or 'when I was happy'. Also verbs referring to past should be past simple ('wanted', 'was'). Suggestion: ensure noun matches context (bike), remove duplicate words, use clear vocabulary for emotions, and keep past tense consistent.

× Yes, I think bags are popular in my country because I see people riding around the neighborhood because uh, no, no, no, umm, it's very convenient and benefit.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because I see people riding around the neighborhood; it's very convenient and beneficial.

Pronoun/noun error: 'bags' should be 'bikes' to match the topic. Redundant 'because' and filler words create a run-on and unclear sentence. Also 'benefit' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'beneficial'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun consistent with the question, remove filler words, avoid repeating 'because', and use the adjective 'beneficial' or phrase 'it benefits people'.