Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes or No), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use past tense consistently) and avoid fillers like 'you know'.

例: No, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child, but I learned to ride one at my cousin's house. For example, I practiced on quiet streets near my home until I could ride without training wheels, which gave me more confidence and independence.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons or examples. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement and word choice) and remove unclear phrases like 'they tend to lie'. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines, especially in cities and rural areas. For instance, many people use bicycles for short commutes because they are cheap and easy to park, and during the pandemic more people started cycling for exercise and to avoid crowded public transport.

× Yeah, actually I experienced using bike, but I don't have like my own bike when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, actually I had the experience of using a bike, but I didn't have my own bike when I was a child.

The phrase 'experienced using bike' is incorrect. Use 'had the experience of using a bike' or 'learned to ride a bike'. Also 'don't have' is present tense while the context is past; change to past 'didn't have'. Include the article 'a' before 'bike'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past events and proper article usage.'

× But I did experience using or you know, know how to use a bike.

✓ But I did learn how to use a bike.

The original is wordy and repeats 'know'. Use a clear past verb 'learn' or phrase 'knew how to ride a bike'. Maintain past tense 'did learn' to match the time frame. Avoid redundant filler phrases like 'or you know'.'

× I think that bikes are popular here in our country, basically here in Philippines, and there are lots of people who uses bikes here and they tend to lie.

✓ I think that bikes are popular here in our country, basically here in the Philippines, and there are lots of people who use bikes here.

Use the article 'the' with 'Philippines' ('the Philippines'). 'Who uses' is incorrect because the relative clause refers to 'lots of people' (plural), so use 'who use'. The phrase 'they tend to lie' is unrelated and likely incorrect; remove it. Maintain plural verb agreement with the plural subject.'