Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify tense and grammar, use a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details with correct linking words. Keep answers natural and within 3–4 sentences. For example, correct tense (past), replace unclear words ("shy") and use verbs correctly ("rode" not "road").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to school every day because my school was nearby, and cycling was faster than walking. Also, I often practiced riding with my friends after class, which helped me become more confident.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, use correct grammar (past/simple present), and give specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'however', 'because', 'nowadays'). Avoid vague words and filler sounds. Provide two concrete reasons why popularity changed (e.g., rise of cars, public transport).

例: Bikes used to be very popular in my country, but less so now. In the past, most families owned a bicycle because it was the cheapest way to travel locally. However, nowadays many people prefer cars or public transport due to increased income and better bus services, so cycling has declined.

× Yes, when I shy I have a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was shy I had a bike.

The sentence uses incorrect tense and form. The student intends to speak about a past state, so use past tense 'was' for the adjective 'shy' and past tense 'had' for possession. Also 'when I shy' is ungrammatical because 'shy' needs a linking verb. Suggestion: use 'when I was shy' or better 'when I was a child' to match context.

× I usually road bike every day when I go to the school.

✓ I usually rode my bike every day when I went to school.

This sentence mixes present habitual 'usually' with past time reference. The context is past (childhood), so verbs should be past tense: 'rode' (past of 'ride') and 'went' (past of 'go'). Also 'road' is the past participle or past of 'ride' spelled 'rode', and 'bike' as a noun needs a possessive 'my bike'. Remove the article 'the' before 'school' unless a specific school is meant; general school takes no article. Suggestion: use 'I usually rode my bike every day when I went to school.'

× Uh, in the past bikes very popular in my country because, uh, every home have bike because in home a ***** like ride road bike and now is not popular because.

✓ In the past, bikes were very popular in my country because almost every home had a bike since people liked riding bikes, but now they are not popular.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: 'in the past' requires past tense 'were' (plural of 'be'), not present 'very popular'. 'Every home have bike' needs past tense 'had' and a determiner: 'a bike' or 'had bikes'. Subject-verb agreement: 'every home had a bike' treats 'every' with singular but 'home' as a unit—use 'every home had a bike' (singular). The fragment 'in home a ***** like ride road bike' is ungrammatical; likely meaning 'people at home liked to ride road bikes' or 'people liked riding bikes.' 'Now is not popular' needs subject 'they' and present 'are not popular'. Suggestion: break into two clauses and correct verbs: 'In the past, bikes were very popular in my country because almost every home had a bike since people liked riding bikes, but now they are not popular.'