Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar and vocabulary and give a clear, direct answer. Use past tense and the correct noun (bike). Begin with a topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it natural and no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present when I was eight, and I used to ride it to my friend’s house every afternoon. Because it was lightweight and bright red, I remember feeling very proud of it.

提案: Use plural form and expand with a specific reason or example. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details connected with linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid vague statements.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use them for short commutes because they are cheap and convenient, and some cities have good cycling lanes which encourages more people to ride.

× Yes, I have a bank when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'have' (present tense) with 'when I was a child' (past time), and used 'bank' instead of 'bike'. This is a tense error and a lexical error. Change 'have' to past simple 'had' to match the past time frame, and replace 'bank' with the correct noun 'bike'. Suggestion: use past simple for actions or states that occurred in childhood (I had, I lived, I played).

× Yes, it is very popular in our country.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in our country.

The question asks about 'bikes' (plural). The student used 'it' (singular) and 'is' (third person singular), which disagrees with the plural subject. Use the plural pronoun 'they' and the plural verb 'are' to agree with 'bikes'. Suggestion: identify the referent (singular or plural) and match pronouns and verbs accordingly.