Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, concise and correct vocabulary; start with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations/repetition, and give a brief specific detail or reason. Correct the word mistake (bike, not pipe), remove filler words (uh, um), and use one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, but, because). Keep answers under five sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My cousin owned one, and I tried to learn to ride it, but I found it difficult and stressful because I kept falling. As a result, I stopped practicing and now I regret not learning earlier.

提案: Respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce fillers and improve grammar (subject-verb agreement: 'they are popular' or 'bikes are popular'). Provide a concrete example or brief comparison to strengthen your answer.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute to work in the morning, especially in crowded cities where traffic is heavy.

× No, I didn't have a pipe when I was a young boy, but uh, my cousin has a one had a 1 and I, I tried to learn how to try this, but, uh, it ended with, uh, a lot of pressure and uh, I regret it.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a young boy, but my cousin had one, and I tried to learn how to ride it, but it ended badly and I regret it.

Problems identified: incorrect noun ('pipe' should be 'bike'), redundant/incorrect phrasing ('has a one had a 1' is ungrammatical), incorrect verb collocation ('learn how to try this' should be 'learn how to ride it'), vague phrase 'ended with a lot of pressure' is unnatural and unclear. Suggestions: use the correct noun 'bike' to match the question context; simplify and correct tense/structure to 'my cousin had one' (past simple) to agree with 'when I was'; use the common collocation 'learn how to ride' for bicycles; replace unclear phrasing with a clear result 'ended badly' or a specific outcome; keep verbs consistent in past tense for this narrative.

× Umm, actually, yes it is. In our country we have a lot of, uh, bikers.

✓ Umm, actually, yes, they are. In our country we have a lot of bikers.

The student answered 'yes it is' which mismatches the plural subject 'bikes' implied by the question about bikes being popular. The correct short answer should match the implied plural: 'yes, they are' or simply 'yes, they are popular.' Suggestion: identify the subject (bikes = plural) and use plural verb/pronoun agreement.

× And because it's uh, easy way to, to move from place to place and uh yeah, it's easy to learn also.

✓ Because they are an easy way to move from place to place, and they are easy to learn to ride.

Errors: 'it's' (singular) refers incorrectly to 'bikes' (plural); missing article before 'easy way' and awkward repetition 'to, to'. Also 'it's easy to learn also' is vague—learn what? Suggestion: make number agreement consistent by using plural pronoun 'they' for bikes; include article 'an' in 'an easy way'; clarify 'learn to ride' to specify the skill.