Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Pronunciation, fluency and clarity need improvement. The answer repeats and contains mispronounced words (‘back’ instead of ‘bike’) and hesitations. Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one short supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. For example, I used to ride it to school every day, which helped me feel independent and active.

提案: Clear vocabulary and sentence structure are needed. The response has wrong words (‘back’, ‘bags’) and repetition, and lacks specific details. Start with a direct opinion, then support it with a specific reason and an example using a linking word (e.g., ‘because’, ‘for example’). Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to run errands in busy urban areas.

× Of course I had a back when I when I was a child, when I was a child.

✓ Of course I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'back' instead of 'bike' (likely a typo) and repeated phrases. Also 'bike' is countable singular and requires the singular form 'a bike.' Remove the duplicate fragment to make a clear, grammatical sentence. Suggestion: proofread for typos and avoid repetition.

× Sure back is bags are very popular in my country.

✓ Sure, bikes are very popular in my country.

The sentence contains multiple errors: 'back' is a typo for 'bike' and 'is bags are' mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. Use the plural noun 'bikes' with the plural verb 'are.' Also include a comma after 'Sure' for natural speech. Suggestion: choose correct noun and ensure subject and verb agree in number.

× You can see many bags on the street.

✓ You can see many bikes on the streets.

The original uses 'bags' instead of 'bikes' and 'on the street' is acceptable but 'on the streets' is more natural when speaking generally about many locations. Preposition 'on' is correct; main issue was wrong noun and number. Suggestion: use the correct noun and pluralize the location when referring generally.

× It's it's available for people who came.

✓ They're available for people who come.

The phrase 'It's it's available' repeats and uses singular 'It' incorrectly. If referring to bikes, use plural 'They're' (They are). 'Who came' is past tense; when stating a general fact, use present tense 'who come.' Alternatively, 'for people who came' would be used only if referring to a specific past event. Suggestion: match subject number and use present tense for general truths, and avoid word repetition.