Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Stay on topic and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense (past for childhood) and avoid contradictory statements. Limit to 2–4 sentences and use linking words (for example, but, because).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school instead. However, I learned to ride a bicycle as a teenager and now I enjoy cycling for exercise.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use coherent linking words (for example, because, therefore, for instance). Avoid vague or unclear phrases (e.g., “ER”). Mention concrete factors such as cost, convenience, and environment in 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to maintain. For example, many people use bicycles for short commutes and market trips since fuel and public transport can be costly. Therefore, cycling remains a common and practical choice for daily travel.

× I am when I was when I was a child, I didn't have a bike because I don't know how to drive.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike because I didn't know how to ride one.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses ('I am when I was', 'don't know' vs past context). Use past tense consistently for past events. Also 'drive' is incorrect for bicycles; use 'ride'. Remove redundant phrases and correct verb tense: 'didn't know' matches 'When I was a child' and 'didn't have'. Suggestion: Keep time markers and verbs in the same tense and use appropriate verb for the action.

× That's why I have a bicycle and I drive with them and enjoy my ride on it.

✓ That's why I didn't have a bicycle then, and I couldn't ride one, so I didn't enjoy riding.

Original sentence has unclear pronoun references ('them' and 'it') that do not agree with singular 'a bicycle'. Also tense inconsistency: the context is past. The student likely meant they did not have a bicycle and could not ride it. If intending to say they now have a bicycle, clarify timing: 'Now I have a bicycle, and I ride it and enjoy it.' Ensure pronouns match number of the noun and tenses align. Suggestion: Use matching singular pronouns for singular nouns ('it' for 'a bicycle') and keep tense consistent.

× Definitely bikes are popular in my country because our country is very poor, but they are perfect for the transportation and ER, cost effective.

✓ Definitely bicycles are popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars, and bicycles are perfect for transportation and are cost-effective.

The sentence has awkward phrasing and tense remains present but contains unclear abbreviation 'ER' and punctuation errors. 'Bikes' is acceptable but 'bicycles' is more formal. Use 'many people cannot afford cars' rather than 'our country is very poor' which is blunt; keep cause and effect clear. Use parallel structure: 'are perfect for transportation and are cost-effective.' Suggestion: Avoid unclear abbreviations, maintain parallel structure, and use concise causal language.

× That's why people can easily buy and use for their transport.

✓ That's why people can easily buy them and use them for transportation.

The verb lacks a direct object: 'buy and use for their transport' is missing what is bought. Use a pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'bicycles', and 'transport' should be 'transportation' or 'their commute'. Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedent. Suggestion: Include the object after 'buy' and repeat or use pronoun for clarity.