Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子含义能被理解，但有多处语法和用词错误，影响表达自然度。建议注意时态和代词用法（例如用“bike”而不是“bag”），简化句子结构，使用连接词提高连贯性，并补充一两条具体细节。具体练习：把句子分成主题句和支持细节，检查主谓一致和词汇正确性。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me and it was pink, which was my favourite colour at the time. I learned to ride with my cousins while my father helped us, and I remember practicing in the park near our house.

提案: 回答能传达观点但词汇错误严重（把“bikes”写成“bags”或“backs”），句子重复且结构简单。建议先给出直接答案，然后用一到两条具体原因支持，使用连接词（for example, because, and）并替换错误词汇，避免重复。

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. This is partly because the government promotes green transport policies and many people find cycling a cheap and convenient way to commute. For example, students often ride to school and office workers cycle short distances to save money and stay fit.

× Yes, I had back when I was a girl and this bag is bought by my father.

✓ Yes, I had one back when I was a girl, and this bag was bought by my father.

句中时态和词形不一致：用過去時描述童年持有自行車應使用過去式（"I had"），但原句缺少代词“one”。另一方面“is bought by my father”使用了現在時，被動語態與前文過去時不一致，應改為過去時被動語態“was bought”。建議在類似描述中保持時態一致，補全必要代詞或名詞（如“one”指自行車）。

× I like it very much.

✓ I liked it very much.

此句談論過去經歷（童年），因此應使用過去時“liked”而非現在時“like”。保持與上下文一致的時態能使表達更準確。

× It is pink, which is the favorite color for a young girl

✓ It was pink, which was my favorite color as a young girl.

同樣是描述過去情況，應使用過去時“was”。此外原句“the favorite color for a young girl”語義較泛，改為“my favorite color as a young girl”更清晰地表達主觀性。

× and I learned to ride a bike with my cousins under the help of my father.

✓ and I learned to ride a bike with my cousins with the help of my father.

英語中常用短語是“with the help of ...”而不是“under the help of ...”。因此將“under”改為“with”以使用正確的介詞搭配。保持句子時態為過去時。

× Yes, I think bags are quite popular in my country because our country upholds the green transportation and we can ride backs to our school and to our company.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because our country upholds green transportation and we can ride bikes to our schools and our workplaces.

多處名詞使用不當：原句將"bikes"錯寫為"bags"、將"backs"誤用。應為“bikes”。此外“green transportation”前不需要冠詞；“school”和“company”在泛指多數人的情況下應使用複數形式或更自然的“workplaces”。最後保持一般現在時描述普遍事實。

× It is cheap and it also can exercise our body.

✓ They are cheap and they also help us exercise our bodies.

主語應與前句複數一致（bikes → they），因此謂語要用複數形式“are”。“can exercise our body”表達不自然，應改為“help us exercise our bodies”或“can help us exercise”使語義更準確且主體一致。