Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and produce a clear, direct topic sentence. Use past tense correctly and add one brief supporting detail. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences).

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used it almost every day to ride to school and play with friends. It was a simple steel bike with a bell, and I remember feeling very proud of it.

提案: Make a clear opinion sentence, use correct noun forms and link ideas logically. Give one or two specific reasons or an example and avoid hesitation sounds. Use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to connect points and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars. For example, in my city many families own cars, and the roads are often crowded, which makes cycling less convenient. However, cycling is becoming more common among students and young professionals.

× I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time. Suggestion: Use past tense for actions or states that occurred in the past (I had, I lived, I liked).

× I guess bike is not popular in my country because there are so many cars in our city.

✓ I guess bicycles are not popular in my country because there are so many cars in our city.

The student used the singular noun 'bike' with a general statement. In general statements about a category, use the plural ('bikes' or 'bicycles') or the singular with an article ('a bike'). Also 'bicycles' is more formal. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for generalizations (Bikes are..., People like...).

× This is This can lead to umm traffic jams but not like.

✓ This can lead to traffic jams.

The original contains repetition ('This is This'), filler words ('umm'), and an incomplete clause ('but not like'). Remove redundancy and fillers and complete the thought. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and complete: state the cause and effect clearly (This can lead to traffic jams).