Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use correct tense and a concise natural structure: start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant words like “in it” after “riding.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood every afternoon, and sometimes I rode with my friends to the park, which made those memories really special.

提案: Make the response more natural by correcting grammar, using linking words, and giving a specific example or reason. Keep it concise and avoid awkward phrases like “since that.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for daily transport. For example, students and office workers often cycle to school or work to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child and I really enjoyed riding in it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I really enjoyed riding it.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do have' with past time marker 'when I was a child'; this is inconsistent. Use past tense 'had' to match 'was a child'. Also, 'riding in it' is unnatural for bicycles; use 'riding it' or 'riding my bike'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense and use natural collocation for riding a bike. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, it is very popular since that you can see a lot of people who are riding bicycle everywhere and they're using it as a form of transportation, going to school or going to work.

✓ Yes, they are very popular because you can see a lot of people riding bicycles everywhere and using them as a form of transportation to go to school or work.

Several issues: 'it is very popular' incorrectly treats 'bikes' (plural subject from the question) as singular—use 'they are' (subject-verb agreement). The connector 'since that' is incorrect; use 'because' or 'since'. 'Riding bicycle' needs plural or article: 'riding bicycles' or 'riding a bicycle'. 'They're using it' has pronoun number mismatch; use 'using them' to refer to bikes. Also simplify 'going to school or going to work' to 'to go to school or work'. Grammar problem type ID:27