Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using correct tenses and linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect pronouns. For example, use past tense for childhood and correct article/noun forms.

例: No, I didn't have a motorbike when I was a child. Instead, I had a bicycle that I used from about age six until I was fifteen, and I rode it to school and around the neighborhood almost every day.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear opinion statement, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors. Use natural vocabulary (e.g., 'crowded', 'commute', 'traffic congestion') and correct grammar. Keep it concise (2–4 sentences) and avoid repetition like 'in my opinion' and 'yes' together.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. Because cities are crowded and traffic congestion is common, many people choose bikes to commute faster; moreover, bicycles are cheaper and easier to park, which makes them convenient for daily travel.

× Well, when I'm a child I do not have a bike, but instead of it I have a bicycle which remains with me up to when I am 15 year old.

✓ Well, when I was a child I did not have a bike; instead, I had a bicycle that stayed with me until I was 15 years old.

The original sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The context is a past situation ('when I was a child'), so verbs should be in the past tense ('was', 'did not have', 'had', 'stayed'). Also use 'until' rather than 'up to when' and plural 'years old'. Suggestion: keep all time references consistent in past tense and use natural phrasing (e.g., 'until I was 15 years old').

× Well in my opinion yes bikes are very popular in my country as there is too much population so that due to the traffic congestion more people prefer to use the bikes and also they are more convenient for their daily commuting.

✓ Well, in my opinion, yes, bikes are very popular in my country because the population is large, and due to traffic congestion more people prefer to use bikes; they are also more convenient for daily commuting.

The sentence uses awkward tense and phrasing. Use 'because' for reason, 'the population is large' (present tense general fact), and 'prefer to use bikes' (no article with plural 'bikes'). Replace 'too much population' with 'population is large' and 'the bikes' with 'bikes'. Also simplify 'their daily commuting' to 'daily commuting'. Suggestion: use clearer connectors and correct noun/adjective usage for general statements.