Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question (e.g. “Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child.” or “No, I didn’t have a bicycle.”). Then give one or two specific supporting details (age, appearance, memories) using linking words (for example, “It was…”, “When I was…”, “Because…”). Avoid hesitations and contradictory statements, and keep your answer to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a large red bike with a comfortable saddle and a bell. I learned to ride it when I was seven, and I used to cycle to the park every afternoon. Because my neighbourhood was quiet, I felt safe practicing there.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons or examples and use linking words. For example, say “Yes, they are popular” or “No, they are not very popular,” then explain who uses them and why (commuting, exercise, cost). Avoid vague words and hesitations, and correct grammar (use 'ride' for bicycles, not 'drive'). Keep to two to four sentences.

例: Bicycles are moderately popular in my country. Many people use them for short trips and exercise because they are cheap and convenient. However, they are less common in big cities where traffic and long distances make cars more practical, so I would say popularity varies by area.

× No, I have. Uh, no, I don't, but I had a bicycle. Looks like a bike. It's, uh, big bicycle. Uh-huh. So when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't. Uh, no, I don't now, but I had a bicycle when I was a child. It looked like a bike. It was a big bicycle.

Multiple pronoun and sentence-structure issues: 'No, I have' is incorrect in response to 'Did you have' because the past auxiliary 'did' should be used; correct: 'No, I didn't.' 'I don't' is present negative and ambiguous here; better: 'I don't now' if referring to present. 'Looks like a bike' and 'It's, uh, big bicycle' are inconsistent tense and missing article: when describing past possession use past tense 'It looked' and 'It was a big bicycle' and include the indefinite article 'a' before 'big bicycle'. Combine short fragments into complete sentences for clarity.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

This sentence is already correct. 'Bikes' plural matches the general question about popularity; no change needed.

× There are it's, uh, probably, uh, no, probably. It's not public, but, umm, some people have it ever.

✓ Uh, probably not very common. It's not very public, but some people have them.

Problems: 'There are it's' is ungrammatical and confused pronouns. 'Probably' duplicated. 'Some people have it ever' mixes singular pronoun 'it' with plural 'some people' and misuses 'ever'. Correct to 'some people have them' (plural pronoun) and remove 'ever'. Also 'not public' is unnatural; 'not very common' or 'not popular' is better.

× I don't. I can't drive it, so someday I wanna drive.

✓ I don't. I can't ride one now, but someday I want to learn to ride.

Problems: 'I can't drive it' is incorrect verb choice for bicycle (use 'ride'). Tense and register: 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to' and 'learn to ride' or 'ride one'. Also 'I don't' is vague—'I don't' what? Here it refers to 'have one', so could be 'I don't have one.' Use explicit phrasing and appropriate present ability/modal: if currently cannot ride, 'I can't ride one now' and future intention 'someday I want to learn to ride'.