Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer partially addresses the question but has errors in grammar, word choice and clarity. Be direct, start with a clear topic sentence, and then add one or two concise supporting details. Use correct tense and prepositions (e.g., "ride a bike to/from school", "occasionally"). Keep to under five sentences and avoid contradictory phrases (you said you didn’t have a bike but then said you rode one).

例: No, I didn't own a bike when I was a child. However, I occasionally rode my friend’s bike to and from primary school when they lent it to me. Those rides were short and mainly for fun rather than daily transport.

提案: Your answer gives a basic opinion but has serious grammar and vocabulary mistakes ("Buy" instead of "Bikes", incorrect word order). Start with a clear opinion sentence, then add a specific reason and an example using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Be concise and avoid vague phrasing. Use relevant vocabulary like "leisure", "commuting", "harbourfront" or "weekends".

例: I think bikes are relatively popular for leisure rather than commuting in my country. For example, many people cycle along the harbourfront on weekends for exercise and relaxation, but most commuters prefer buses or cars for daily travel.

× No, I didn't. When I was young I usually rode a bike from the primary school every once in a while.

✓ No, I didn't. When I was young I usually rode my bike to primary school once in a while.

The original sentence has issues with word choice and preposition use rather than the past tense form. 'Rode' is correct for past tense, but 'a bike' should be 'my bike' to sound natural when referring to a personal possession. 'From the primary school' is incorrect; use 'to primary school' to indicate destination. 'Every once in a while' is redundant with 'usually'; choose one. Here 'once in a while' fits the intended meaning of occasional action. Suggestion: keep past tense 'rode', use 'my bike', use the correct preposition 'to', and avoid combining 'usually' with 'once in a while'.

× Buy is only popular for leisure use that usually people ride a bike from the harbour side and during the weekend, but it's not a necessary transportation for us.

✓ Bicycles are only popular for leisure; people usually ride bikes along the harbour and on weekends, but they are not a necessary means of transportation for us.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'Buy' is a typo and should be 'Bikes' or 'Bicycles' (singular/plural issue). Pronoun and subject references are inconsistent: use 'people usually' or 'they', not both improperly. 'Ride a bike from the harbour side' uses wrong preposition 'from' and 'harbour side' is better expressed as 'along the harbour'. 'During the weekend' should be 'on weekends' for habitual action. 'A necessary transportation' is incorrect collocation; use 'a necessary means of transportation' or 'necessary transportation' without 'a'. The corrected sentence fixes pronoun use, plurality, prepositions, and natural collocations. Suggestion: use 'bicycles' as the subject, consistent plural pronouns, 'along' or 'by' for location, 'on weekends' for habitual time, and 'means of transportation' for correct noun phrase.