Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatically correct, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and vocabulary (childhood = when I was a child; bike color, type, and how you used it). Avoid filler words and keep to fewer than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. It was a blue road bike that my parents bought for me when I was about eight. I often rode it on quiet country roads near our house, and I used it for both short trips and weekend practice rides.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with specific reasons or an example using linking words (e.g. “because,” “for example,” “last month”). Use correct subject-verb agreement and location names clearly. Replace hesitations with concise phrasing and provide one concrete example or statistic if possible.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in the Philippines, especially in my province of Pangasinan. For example, many people use bicycles for short commutes, and last month our town organized a cycling race that attracted dozens of participants.

× Yes, I am. Uh, bye. When a child it's a color blue and it's a cold road bike or race bike.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a blue road or racing bike when I was a child.

The student used incorrect pronouns and auxiliary verbs for past possession. 'Yes, I am' is wrong for answering 'Did you have...?' so use 'Yes, I did.' 'Bye' is likely 'bike' misspelled; replace with 'I had'. 'When a child' is ungrammatical; use 'when I was a child.' 'it's a color blue' and 'it's a cold road bike or race bike' misuse 'it' and adjective order; correct to 'a blue road or racing bike.' Suggestions: use the past auxiliary 'did' for yes/no questions about the past, include the subject 'I' with 'was' for age/time phrases, place adjectives before nouns and use 'racing' as the adjective form.

× Yes, it's very popular here in the Philippines, especially here in my city, mother and Pangasinan.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular here in the Philippines, especially in my city, Manaoag in Pangasinan.

The sentence misuses 'it's' to refer to 'bikes' (plural); use 'bikes are.' Also 'mother' appears to be a misrecognition; likely a place name is intended. Replace with correct place name and use preposition 'in' for locations. Suggestions: make pronoun/verb agree with the noun number and check place names; use 'in' before city and province names.

× And actually last month they conduct or they, yeah, they conduct a race here in my province.

✓ And actually last month they held a race here in my province.

The event occurred in the past so the verb should be past tense. 'They conduct' is present; change to 'they held' or 'they conducted' to match 'last month.' Also avoid filler hesitations when answering tests. Suggestions: use the past simple for completed actions with time expressions like 'last month'.