Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense and concise phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two supporting details using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid filler words like “and yeah.” Also correct collocations: say “ride a bicycle” or “ride bikes.”

例: Yes, I did. I loved riding a bicycle when I was a child, and I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood. For example, I often rode to a nearby park with my friends, which helped me become independent and active.

提案: Answer directly, use smoother linking words and more precise vocabulary. Replace vague phrases like “or something like that” with specific examples, use plural forms correctly (“ride bikes”, “bicyclists”), and include a brief reason or comparison. Keep to 2–3 sentences max.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Japan because many people use them for short trips to school, work, or shopping. For instance, in cities it’s common to see students cycling to school and adults using bikes to visit nearby supermarkets because it’s cheap and convenient.

× I enjoy riding bicycle when I was a little.

✓ I enjoyed riding a bicycle when I was little.

Tense and verb form mismatch: the student uses 'enjoy' (present) with 'when I was a little' (past). Also 'bicycle' needs an article. Change 'enjoy' to past 'enjoyed' to match the past time reference and add the article 'a'. Use 'little' without 'a' after 'was'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to time expressions and include appropriate articles: 'I enjoyed riding a bicycle when I was little.'

× I enjoy riding bicycle when I was a little.

✓ I enjoyed riding a bicycle when I was little.

The noun 'bicycle' requires an article in this context ('a bicycle'). Also the time phrase 'when I was little' requires past tense, so change 'enjoy' to 'enjoyed'. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular countable nouns: 'a bicycle.'

× So I think the population of bicyclist is very high in Japan.

✓ So I think the number of bicyclists is very high in Japan.

Word choice and count noun agreement: 'population' is not the best collocation for people who ride bikes; 'number' fits better. 'Bicyclist' should be plural 'bicyclists' to match 'number of'. Suggestion: Use 'number of' with plural nouns: 'the number of bicyclists is very high.'

× I think so because so many people try to ride bike to go everywhere such as schools, shopping centers or supermarkets or something like that.

✓ I think so because many people ride bikes to go everywhere, such as to schools, shopping centers, or supermarkets.

Multiple preposition and article issues: 'ride bike' needs plural and article or plural 'bikes'; 'to go everywhere' is fine but include commas; items like 'schools' should be preceded by 'to' when showing direction. Remove 'try to' if meaning is habitual; 'or something like that' is informal and unnecessary. Suggestion: Use 'ride bikes' for habitual actions and include 'to' before destinations: 'ride bikes to go everywhere, such as to schools...'.