Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and add a bit more detail. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct the tense and article usage, and add one or two brief supporting details (where/why you liked it or how you used it). Keep your answer natural and under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon after school, and it was my main way to visit friends. Because the streets were quiet, I felt safe riding on my own.

提案: Work on accuracy, fluency and coherence. Use correct articles and plural forms, reduce hesitations (remove 'uh'), and organize supporting points with a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'for example'). Provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion in one or two extra sentences.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For example, lots of workers ride to the office to avoid traffic, and there are many cycling lanes in cities that make riding convenient.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'a' before the noun 'child'. In English we say 'a child' when referring to someone in childhood in general. Add 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatically complete: 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: Include appropriate articles (a/an/the) before singular countable nouns when required.

× Yes, I think bike is more popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are more popular in my country.

The subject 'bike' refers generally to bicycles in the country and should be plural. Also the verb 'is' must agree with the plural subject, so use 'bikes are'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns and matching plural verbs when speaking about things in general (bikes are, cars are).

× Uh, there are many people uh, are riding bicycle and they go to work bicycle and they love to ride bicycle also.

✓ There are many people who ride bicycles; they go to work by bicycle and they also love to ride them.

Multiple problems: missing relative pronoun 'who' to connect 'people' with the clause; 'ride' (base form) is used after 'who' rather than 'are riding' to express habitual action; 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' when speaking generally; use the preposition 'by' for modes of transport ('go to work by bicycle'); pronoun 'them' refers back to 'bicycles' for clarity; adverb 'also' fits better before or after verb phrase. Suggestion: Use 'who' for people + simple present for habitual actions (people who ride bicycles), use 'by' for transport, make nouns plural when general, and use pronouns ('them') to avoid repetition.