Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetitions and grammar errors (e.g., "I used to ride it every evening" not "ride her ride it"). Use linking words like "and" or "so" correctly and keep to a maximum of about 3–4 short sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike as a child. I used to ride it every evening at sunset with my mother, and we often had picnics in the park. Those rides were one of my favorite parts of childhood.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific reasons with clear linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and incorrect phrases (e.g., "biking" should be "cycling" or "riding bikes"). Use one or two concrete reasons and, if possible, a brief comparison or example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars, motorcycles or scooters because they are faster and more convenient for long distances, so you rarely see people cycling in cities.

× I I had a bike and I used to ride her ride it like every day on sunsets.

✓ I had a bike and I used to ride it almost every day at sunset.

This sentence contains multiple issues: an accidental repeated 'I' (typo), incorrect pronoun 'her' for a bike (should be 'it'), awkward phrase 'like every day on sunsets' (wrong preposition and plural). According to the grammar types list, these map to incorrect use of pronouns (12) and incorrect use of prepositions (11) and present/past habitual tense is fine but wording needed adjustment. Use 'ride it' for objects, 'almost every day' for habitual frequency, and 'at sunset' (singular time expression) or 'in the evenings' for repeated occurrences. Avoid duplicating words.

× I went to the park with my mother and then we went.

✓ I went to the park with my mother and then we stayed there.

The original repeats 'went' resulting in a sentence structure error (26). The intended meaning is unclear; likely they meant they remained or did something after arriving. I changed the second clause to 'we stayed there' to make the sequence logical and avoid repetition. Maintain past tense for a past narrative (5). If the student meant they left, 'then we left' would be correct.

× We go there and have a picnic, enjoy so much.

✓ We would go there and have a picnic and enjoy it so much.

This contains incorrect tense usage (present 'go' and 'have') when describing habitual past actions; change to 'would go' or 'used to go' to match past habitual context (6 and 5). Also missing object for 'enjoy' and missing conjunction clarity. I added 'and' and 'it' to complete the verb's object and used 'would go' to match 'I had a bike and I used to ride it' earlier. Alternatively, 'We went there and had a picnic and enjoyed it very much.' would also be correct.

× No I don't because most people use their cars or motorcycles and scooters but I don't see a lot of people using biking not even skates is in my country is more natural and modern use cars and motorcycles.

✓ No, I don't. Most people use cars, motorcycles, or scooters. I don't see many people biking or even skating; in my country it is more common and modern to use cars and motorcycles.

This long run-on sentence has several problems: incorrect negation and clause structure, incorrect gerund phrasing 'using biking', incorrect insertion of 'is', and article/word-order issues (11,12,13,26,22). I split it into clear sentences, used 'many' (quantifier) and 'biking' and 'skating' correctly as gerunds, and corrected the clause 'in my country it is more common and modern to use cars and motorcycles' for natural phrasing. Keep tense present simple for general statements (6).