Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal fakat birkaç hata ve belirsizlik var. İfade hataları ("reading around" yerine "riding around"; "still became" anlamsız) düzeltilmeli. Ayrıca cevap gereğinden uzun veya dağınık; doğrudan başlık cümlesiyle başlayıp 1–2 destekleyici cümle eklemeli ve bağlaçlar düzgün kullanılmalı (e.g. "however", "because"). Spesifik ayrıntı ekleyerek neden bıraktığınızı ve bisikletten ne tür anılarınız olduğunu kısaca belirtin. Maksimum 3–4 cümle ve tutarlı zaman kullanımıyla akıcılığı artırın.

例: Yes. I had a bike as a child and I loved riding it around my neighbourhood, especially in the evenings and during school holidays. However, I gradually stopped using it as I grew older because I became much busier with school and part-time jobs. Nowadays I usually walk or take public transport for short trips.

提案: Cevap mantıklı ve yapılandırılmış; ancak birkaç küçük dil hatası (iki kez "live" yazılmış; son cümlede "lack of proper cycling" yerine "lack of proper cycling infrastructure" olmalı) ve eksik bağlaç/tamamlama var. Daha spesifik örnekler veya karşılaştırmalar ekleyin (ör. istatistiksel gözlem veya gözlemlenen durum). Cümleleri 2–3 destekleyici cümleyle sınırlandırın ve uygun bağlaçlar kullanın.

例: It depends on the area. In smaller towns and coastal villages bicycles are quite common because streets are quieter and distances are short. By contrast, in large cities they are less popular due to heavy traffic and a lack of proper cycling infrastructure, which makes cycling unsafe for many people.

× Yeah, sure, when I was a child I had a bike and I really enjoyed reading around my neighborhood, especially in the evenings or during school holidays.

✓ Yeah, sure, when I was a child I had a bike and I really enjoyed riding around my neighborhood, especially in the evenings or during school holidays.

The verb 'reading' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is to move on a bike, which is 'ride'. Use the past tense 'rode' only if recounting a specific single event, but here 'enjoyed riding' (gerund after 'enjoyed') is correct. Suggestion: replace 'reading' with 'riding' to reflect the correct action. Additionally, keep consistent past reference: 'I had' and 'I really enjoyed riding' are both correctly aligned.

× These day, I most prefer walking or using public transportation.

✓ These days, I mostly prefer walking or using public transportation.

Two issues: 'These day' is incorrect; the correct plural is 'These days' (plural form for current period). 'most prefer' is awkward; the adverb 'mostly' should modify 'prefer' to indicate general preference. Suggestion: use 'These days, I mostly prefer...'. Also note subject-verb agreement is fine.

× To be honest, I would say it really depends on where people live live.

✓ To be honest, I would say it really depends on where people live.

There is a duplicated word 'live live', which is a typographical/redundant error causing sentence structure disruption. Remove the extra 'live'. Suggestion: proofread to avoid repeated words.

× In smaller towns or coastal areas, bicycles are relatively common because the streets are less crowded and people can move around more comfortably.

✓ In smaller towns or coastal areas, bicycles are relatively common because the streets are less crowded and people can move around more comfortably.

No grammatical error detected in this sentence; it is correct as written. No change needed.

× On the other hand, in bigger cities I don't think bicycles are used very frequently since heavy traffic and the lack of proper cycling.

✓ On the other hand, in bigger cities I don't think bicycles are used very frequently because of heavy traffic and the lack of proper cycling infrastructure.

The original sentence is incomplete: 'since heavy traffic and the lack of proper cycling' lacks a noun to complete the phrase. Use 'because of' and add the noun 'infrastructure' after 'cycling' to clarify the meaning. Suggestion: use 'because of heavy traffic and the lack of proper cycling infrastructure.'