Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Avoid repeating the examiner's question. Give a direct answer (yes/no) with a brief topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (maximum 5 sentences). For example, mention who gave the bike, how old you were, or a memorable activity you did with it.

例: Yes. I had a small red bicycle when I was about seven, which my parents bought for me as a birthday present. Because it had training wheels, I learned to ride safely and spent many afternoons practicing with my older brother, which helped me gain confidence quickly.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason). Avoid repeating phrases and provide specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, for instance, therefore). Mention who uses bikes, for which purposes, and give one or two concrete examples or statistics if possible. Use varied vocabulary and correct grammar (e.g., singular/plural agreement).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for daily commuting and small deliveries. For example, students and office workers often ride scooters to avoid traffic, and local shops rely on motorcycles like the Honda UH-70 and models from Yamaha for quick deliveries, so you see them on most streets every day.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because the bikes are popular in my country because people use bikes for their daily use and they are much popular.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because people use them for daily transportation and they are very common.

This sentence repeats phrases and has awkward structure. Issue falls under sentence structure errors (ID 26) and adjective/adverb use (ID 13). Remove repetition, replace 'the bikes' with the pronoun 'them' to avoid redundancy (pronoun use, ID 12), change 'for their daily use' to 'for daily transportation' for natural expression, and use 'very common' instead of 'much popular' because 'popular' does not collocate with 'much'. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same clause; use pronouns and natural collocations.

× The most popular bikes in my country is Honda UH-70 and Yamaha.

✓ The most popular bikes in my country are Honda UH-70 and Yamaha.

This is a subject-verb agreement error (ID 27) and singular/plural issue (ID 1). The subject 'bikes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, when listing models, ensure parallel structure; use 'are' to agree with plural subject. If referring to a single brand and a model, ensure correct singular/plural form accordingly.