Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и сделайте ответ более естественным и компактным. Вместо «I were» используйте «I was». Можно добавить краткое объяснение или чувство (например, почему не было велосипеда) — это добавит содержания, но не делайте ответ слишком длинным. Используйте связку для плавности, например «because» или «so».

例: No, unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school or took the bus.

提案: Сделайте утверждение более уверенным и исправьте время и порядок слов. Избегайте слов-паразитов («uh») и незавершённых фраз. Используйте связку (например, «because» или «for example») и дайте конкретный пример времени или места, чтобы усилить содержание.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for daily commuting. For example, every morning I see a lot of people riding to work on the main road near my house.

× No, unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I were a child.

✓ No, unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The verb 'were' is the past tense of 'to be' used with plural subjects or in subjunctive mood. The subject here is 'I', so the correct past tense form is 'was'. Use 'was' for first person singular in simple past. Suggestion: use 'I was' for past statements about yourself.

× Yes, I thought, uh, our country has a big popularity of using bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country.

The student used 'thought' (past) but context asks a general present opinion, so present simple 'think' is required. The phrase 'has a big popularity of using bikes' is unidiomatic: 'popular' is the correct adjective and 'in our country' is the right prepositional phrase. Suggestion: use 'I think' for present opinions and 'bikes are popular' or 'popular in our country'.

× Every morning I see the people who, uh, commuting to the work by bikes and.

✓ Every morning I see people commuting to work by bike.

Problems: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'people', incorrect verb form 'commuting' needs to follow 'see' as present participle (which is fine) but the original had extra 'who' making structure awkward; 'to the work' should be 'to work' (no article), and 'by bikes and' was incomplete. Suggestion: remove 'the' before 'people', remove 'who', use 'commuting' directly, use 'to work' and 'by bike' (or 'by bikes') to make a concise, grammatical sentence.