Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid irrelevant or contradictory information (e.g., saying you are "old" is unnecessary) and correct small grammar mistakes (use present perfect or past simple appropriately). Use linking words like "but" or "however" correctly.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels and I used it to ride to my friend’s house every weekend. However, it was damaged years ago, so I no longer have it.

提案: Answer directly, then support with clear, specific reasons or examples. Avoid hesitation and repetition. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "popular," "common," "widely used") and linking words such as "because" or "for example" to make your response coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, in cities you can often see bike lanes and shared-bike schemes, which makes cycling convenient and common.

× Actually I did have a bike when I was a child, but it's broken now and I'm old so I don't really have one at the meantime.

✓ Actually I did have a bike when I was a child, but it's broken now and I'm old so I don't really have one at the moment.

The phrase 'at the meantime' is incorrect English. The correct phrase is 'at the moment' or simply 'at the moment' to indicate the present time. This is an issue with present-tense/adverbial expression usage. Suggestion: use 'at the moment' or 'right now' when referring to the current situation. Also note 'did have' is acceptable for emphasis about the past; keep it because the question asked about childhood.

× I would say so I would, I would say bikes are are famous enough or have their reputation in this country, yeah.

✓ I would say so. I think bikes are quite popular and have a good reputation in this country.

This sentence contains repetition ('I would say so I would') and an extra duplicated word ('are are'), which are sentence structure errors and reduce clarity. 'Famous enough' is awkward for popularity; 'popular' or 'quite popular' is more natural. Suggestion: remove repetitions, fix duplicated words, and choose a natural adjective like 'popular' and a clear structure: 'I would say so. I think bikes are quite popular and have a good reputation in this country.'