Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and natural: answer directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one or two supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences. For example, state whether you had a bike, then give when/how you used it and one brief reason or memory.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to go to my friend’s house and to explore the neighborhood, which helped me become more independent. I especially remember riding with my brother on weekends.

提案: Improve grammar, coherence and specificity: start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words (for example, because/also), correct verb forms, and add a specific reason or example. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and daily commutes. For example, students and office workers often cycle to avoid traffic, and cycling is also encouraged as a cheap way to stay fit.

× When I was a child. I had I had a bike. I like biking.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike. I liked biking.

The original contains sentence fragments and repetition. 'When I was a child.' is a fragment; combine into a complete sentence. 'I had I had a bike' repeats the clause; remove duplication. Because the time marker 'When I was a child' refers to past time, the verb describing a habitual past action should be in simple past ('liked' instead of 'like'). Use a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: write complete sentences and match past tense for past-time references.

× Bike is one of the. Popular in my country because it's just for transportation.

✓ Bicycles are very popular in my country because they are mainly used for transportation.

The original has a fragment 'one of the.' and incorrect singular 'Bike is' when speaking generally about bikes in a country; use plural 'Bicycles are' or 'Bikes are' to express general popularity. Also replace the fragment with a complete predicate. Maintain subject-verb agreement (plural subject with plural verb). Suggestion: use plural noun when speaking about a class of items and ensure sentences are complete.

× It can helps also people to develop their strength.

✓ It can also help people develop their strength.

After modal 'can', use the base form of the verb ('help'), not 'helps'. The adverb 'also' should be placed before the main verb for natural flow. 'To develop' can be shortened to 'develop' after 'help'. Suggestion: after modal verbs use base verb forms and place adverbs (like 'also') in a natural position: 'can also help'.