Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), then give one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary words.

例: Yes, I did. I had several toys as a child, and one of my favourite vehicles was a small black-and-red bicycle. It had a comfortable seat and training wheels at first, which helped me learn to ride quickly.

提案: Answer directly and use smoother linking words and correct grammar. Give a brief reason and a specific example or statistic if possible, staying within 3–4 sentences. Replace filler words like “uh.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in India because they are affordable and fuel-efficient. For example, many families buy motorcycles for daily commuting and only purchase cars later when they can afford them. Additionally, bikes are easier to park and navigate through crowded city streets.

× I have many toys and vehicles when I was a child.

✓ I had many toys and vehicles when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with the past time phrase 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for events that occurred in childhood: 'I had...'.

× One of them them is a bike which was of color black and red.

✓ One of them was a bike, which was black and red.

There is a repeated word 'them them' (typo) and a subject-verb agreement/time consistency issue: 'One of them is a bike' uses present 'is' while referring to childhood. Change 'is' to past 'was' to match context. Also 'which was of color black and red' is wordy; use 'which was black and red'. Suggestion: Remove duplicate word, keep past tense, and simplify adjective phrase.

× Uh, in my country India, bikes are very popular vehicles among the available vehicles.

✓ Uh, in my country, India, bikes are very popular vehicles among the available means of transport.

Punctuation and article use: include commas around 'India' as an appositive. The phrase 'available vehicles' is awkward and repetitive. Replace with 'means of transport' or simply 'vehicles'. Suggestion: Use commas for appositives and choose a natural collocation: 'popular vehicles' or 'popular means of transport'.

× Uh, many people have bike before they buy cars.

✓ Uh, many people have a bike before they buy a car.

Countable noun 'bike' requires an article in singular form: 'a bike'. Also 'cars' should match general singular 'a car' when stating a typical progression; alternatively use plurals consistently: 'many people have bikes before they buy cars.' Suggestion: Use consistent singular or plural forms and include articles for singular countable nouns.