Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but improve coherence and tense consistency. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Watch verb tenses (use past consistently) and avoid slight contradictions (e.g., “did have” then present “it's”).

例: Yes. I had a small pink tricycle when I was six. It had two little gears and was quite unstable, so it often broke; as a result, I learned to be careful when riding it.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is wordy and has grammar issues. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use concise phrasing and correct articles/plurals (e.g., “there are many transportation options”).

例: Not really. I think bikes are less popular because there are many convenient alternatives, such as buses and motorcycles, and urban traffic and safety concerns also discourage people from cycling.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was six years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was six years old.

Using 'did have' here is unnecessary for a simple past affirmative statement. In English, simple past is normally formed with the past form of the verb alone (had). Using 'did' + base verb is used for emphatic or negative/question forms. Suggestion: Use 'I had' for a natural affirmative past sentence.

× It was a very small pink tricycle with two little gears at the bottom.

✓ It was a very small pink tricycle with two small gears at the bottom.

The word 'little' can be used, but when describing size in this context 'small' is more natural and consistent with 'very small' earlier. Also avoid repetition of 'little' and 'small' conflicting; here 'two small gears' is clearer. Suggestion: Use consistent adjective choices and avoid redundant or conflicting size words.

× It's very unstable and broke easily.

✓ It was very unstable and broke easily.

The sentence mixes present tense ('It's') with past tense ('broke'). Since the speaker is describing a past object, both verbs should be past tense. Use 'It was' to match 'broke'. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same time frame when describing past events.

× I don't think that bikes are popular with people in my country due to the fact that they are many transportation choices that they use except for bikes.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because there are many other transportation choices people use besides bikes.

Multiple issues: 'they are many' is ungrammatical; correct structure is 'there are many'. The pronoun 'they' incorrectly refers to 'transportation choices' and is unnecessary. 'Due to the fact that' is wordy; 'because' is simpler. 'Except for bikes' should be 'besides bikes' or 'other than bikes'. Suggestions: Use 'there are' for existence, avoid unnecessary pronouns, choose concise connectors like 'because', and use 'other than' or 'besides' for exclusion.