Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản, cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn, và nêu chi tiết cụ thể liên quan đến chiếc xe. Tránh dùng từ sai (ví dụ: “pipe” không đúng), sửa thì động từ (quá khứ) và dùng tối đa 3–4 câu tự nhiên. Ví dụ: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết (màu sắc, ai tặng/mua, cảm nhận).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I actually had two bikes: one was yellow and the other was blue. My parents bought the first one for me when I was seven, and I used to ride it to visit my friends around the neighbourhood.

提案: Cần dùng cấu trúc mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (số ít/số nhiều, động từ). Thêm một lý do hoặc ví dụ cụ thể để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn. Dùng liên từ để nối ý nếu có thêm chi tiết.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical. Many people use them for short trips to work or the market, especially in small towns where traffic is light. For example, I often see entire families riding bikes together on weekends.

× Yes, I had to buy when I was a child and I have two pipe one is yellow and one is blue.

✓ Yes, I bought one when I was a child and I have two pipes: one is yellow and one is blue.

The student used 'had to buy' which implies obligation rather than simple past action; use simple past 'bought' for a completed action in the past. Also 'pipe' should be plural 'pipes' to match 'two', and punctuation was improved for clarity. Suggestion: replace 'had to buy' with 'bought' when describing something you purchased in the past, and ensure nouns agree in number with their quantifiers.

× Of course, it's so popular. Umm, everybody, every family has a bike. Everyone have a bike.

✓ Of course, it's very popular. Umm, everybody and every family has a bike. Everyone has a bike.

'It's so popular' is informal; 'very popular' is better. The main grammatical error is subject-verb agreement: 'Everyone' is singular and requires 'has' not 'have'. Also 'everybody, every family' was awkwardly punctuated; join with 'and' and ensure 'has' matches each singular subject. Suggestion: use 'has' with singular indefinite pronouns like 'everyone' and 'everybody', and keep phrasing concise.