Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar errors, avoid filler words and repetition, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, follow with a supporting detail using a linking word, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, correct verb usage (ride/wrote → ride) and replace fillers like “uh”.

例: Yes. I had a bike as a child and I often rode it with my friends in the evenings. Because our neighborhood was quiet, we practiced tricks and raced each other, which was great fun. Those rides helped me feel independent and active.

提案: Correct grammar and word order, avoid repetition, and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make the answer coherent, and keep it to 2–4 sentences. Fix collocations: “ride bicycles,” “popular,” and remove extra words like “very very.”

例: Yes. Bicycles are popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many office workers cycle to the train station to avoid traffic, and students often use bikes to get to school.

× I had a bike and every time, uh, I used to ride it with my friends in the street because it was very funny activity.

✓ I had a bike and, every time, I used to ride it with my friends in the street because it was a very fun activity.

Error: 'funny activity' is not the best collocation; 'funny' usually means humorous. Use 'fun' as an adjective before 'activity.' Also added 'a' before 'very fun activity' and removed filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'fun' for enjoyable experiences and include the article 'a.'

× And every time, uh, when I write it, I enjoy it.

✓ And every time I rode it, I enjoyed it.

Error: 'write' is incorrect verb; context refers to riding a bike in the past. The correct past form is 'rode' (simple past of 'ride') and 'enjoyed' should match past tense. Suggestion: match verbs to the past time reference and avoid present participle confusion.

× Yes, in my country riding bicycle is very common in because it's a very very convenient type of transport.

✓ Yes, in my country riding a bicycle is very common because it's a very, very convenient type of transport.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'bicycle' and extra preposition 'in' is unnecessary. Also added commas and corrected phrasing. Suggestion: use 'riding a bicycle' and omit stray prepositions.

× A lot of people ride bicycles to commute and just have enjoy.

✓ A lot of people ride bicycles to commute and just enjoy it.

Errors: unnecessary word 'have' before 'enjoy' and missing object 'it.' The verb 'enjoy' does not need 'have' in this context. Suggestion: use 'just enjoy it' to express simple enjoyment.