Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, grammatical and relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I did"), then give one or two brief supporting details with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and unrelated reasons (e.g. "I don't want to waste my time" is vague). Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Give a specific reason or a short example to sound more natural.

例: Yes, I did. I had a blue bicycle from about age eight until I was twelve, but I sold it because I preferred walking and public transport; riding long distances felt time-consuming for me.

提案: Instead of asking the examiner to clarify, try to answer directly and then briefly acknowledge the ambiguity. Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason or example, using linking words (however, while, for example). Keep it to one topic sentence plus one or two supporting sentences.

例: It depends: motorcycles are very popular as a main form of transport, while regular bicycles are less common in cities. For example, many people use motorbikes for commuting because they are faster, but in parks and university areas you still see quite a few cyclists.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child, but I sold it because I don't like to cycling, I don't like cycling and I don't want to waste my time anymore.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I sold it because I didn't like cycling; I didn't like cycling and I didn't want to waste my time anymore.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'child' and inconsistent tense usage. The context is past (when you were a child), so reasons for selling should also be in the past: use 'didn't like' and 'didn't want'. Also 'to cycling' is incorrect: after 'like' use the gerund 'cycling' without 'to'. Suggested improvements: use the correct article 'a child'; keep verb tenses consistent (use past simple for actions and states in the past); use 'like' + gerund (like cycling) rather than 'like to cycling'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses for clarity.

× So which bikes are you talking about? Are you talking about motorcycles or normal bicycles?

✓ Do you mean motorcycles or ordinary bicycles?

The original is repetitive and slightly informal. 'So which bikes are you talking about?' and 'Are you talking about...' repeat the same idea. Better: 'Do you mean motorcycles or ordinary bicycles?' 'Normal' is acceptable but 'ordinary' or 'regular' is more natural. This correction simplifies sentence structure and avoids redundancy.