Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и используйте простое, естественное предложение. Сфокусируйтесь на правильном времени (past simple) и избегайте излишних слов. Можно добавить одно-два уточняющих предложения с деталями (например, цвет, когда получили велосипед, что любили делать), но не более 3 дополнительных предложений. Также избегайте повторов и междометий (uh, umm).

例: Yes, I had a bright red bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my parents on my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ ясно и логично, используя связующие слова (for example, because, so) и конкретные причины. Уберите слова-паразиты и повторы. Дайте 1–2 конкретных примера, подтверждающих ваше мнение (например, разнообразие использования, инфраструктура, стоимость).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to go shopping, and cities have dedicated bike lanes that make cycling safer.

× Yes, I have a nice wonderful bike when I were a child.

✓ Yes, I had a nice, wonderful bike when I was a child.

The speaker is describing a past situation, so past tense should be used. 'Have' (present) is incorrect; use 'had' (past). Also 'were' is incorrect for singular first person in past simple; use 'was'. Add a comma between adjectives for correct punctuation. Suggestion: use past simple consistently for past events (subject + past verb), and separate coordinate adjectives with a comma. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× Yes, I think a bike it's uh, popular mind of transport in my country because umm, bike, umm uh, bike is available transport mode of transport.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are a popular mode of transport in my country because bikes are an available form of transport.

Multiple subject-verb agreement and article errors: the general statement about bikes requires plural subject 'bikes' with plural verb 'are' rather than 'a bike it's'. 'It's' (it is) does not agree with 'a bike' in this context; use plural to express general truth. 'Mind of transport' is incorrect word choice; correct collocation is 'mode of transport' or 'form of transport'. Also avoid repeating words; streamline to 'bikes are an available form of transport.' Suggestion: when making general statements, use plural nouns with plural verbs or use singular generic with 'a' plus singular verb; choose consistent construction and use correct collocations. Grammar Problem Type ID: 27