Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and tense consistency, be concise, and add a brief supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then one short reason or consequence. Use linking word like 'because' or 'so'. Keep to 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I never learned to ride it because I had an accident when I was 14. As a result, I mostly used it as decoration in our yard.

提案: Use clear time references and correct phrases, avoid hesitations, and give a specific reason with a linking word. Start with a direct opinion, then one concise reason using words like 'nowadays' and 'because'.

例: Bicycles were more popular in the past, but nowadays they are less common because most people prefer cars for convenience and speed. As a result, fewer people commute by bike in cities.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child, but I really didn't know how to ride a bicycle because I have an accident at 14.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I really didn't know how to ride a bicycle because I had an accident at 14.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do have', 'have an accident') with past time reference ('when I was a child', 'didn't know', 'at 14'). Use past tense consistently for past events. Change 'do have' to 'had' and 'have an accident' to 'had an accident' to match past time frame. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent by using past simple for completed actions in the past (e.g., 'I had a bike', 'I didn't know', 'I had an accident at 14').

× In the old century it is, but for this century it is not anymore, because cars are the most useful and it can make the time more umm. Pressure to go somewhere so car is the most.

✓ In the past century they were, but in this century they are not anymore, because cars are more useful and save time, so cars are preferred.

Multiple tense and agreement issues: 'In the old century it is' mixes time references and uses singular 'it' for plural 'bikes'. Use past tense 'were' for the past century and plural pronoun 'they' for bikes. 'For this century it is not anymore' should be 'in this century they are not anymore' or better 'in this century they are not as popular anymore.' 'Cars are the most useful' is awkward; use comparative 'cars are more useful' and 'it can make the time more... Pressure' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'save time' or 'reduce travel time.' 'So car is the most' should be 'so cars are preferred' or 'so cars are the most common.' Suggestion: Use correct subject-pronoun agreement (bikes -> they), match tense to time references, use comparative forms (more useful), and prefer clear phrases such as 'save time' or 'preferred.'