Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng có thể làm tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn bằng cách: 1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng; 2) Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (ví dụ: “and”, “so”); 3) Chỉnh ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ: “from when I was six” → “when I was six” hoặc “at the age of six”); 4) Giảm dư thừa (không cần nói cả “from a business trip” nếu không quan trọng).

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike while he was on a business trip, and I learned to ride it when I was six. It became my favorite way to get around the neighborhood, so I spent many afternoons practicing with my friends.

提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, độ tự nhiên và cụ thể hơn: 1) Tránh tiếng lấp đầy như “umm”; 2) Sử dụng danh từ số nhiều/động từ phù hợp (ví dụ: “Bikes are popular” và “people pursue”); 3) Thêm lý do cụ thể hoặc ví dụ; 4) Dùng liên từ để nối ý (ví dụ: “because” + cụ thể hóa).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Many people prefer cycling because it helps them stay fit and also reduces fuel costs, especially in big cities where traffic and parking are problematic.

× My father got it for me from a business trip and I learned how to ride it from when I was six years old.

✓ My father brought it back for me from a business trip, and I learned to ride it when I was six years old.

The sentence uses past tense which is appropriate, but contains awkward or incorrect verb choices and structure. 'Got it for me from a business trip' is unnatural; 'brought it back for me from a business trip' is clearer. 'Learned how to ride it from when I was six years old' is wordy and unidiomatic; use 'learned to ride it when I was six years old.' Suggestion: use clear past-tense verbs and simpler infinitive constructions (learned to ride).

× Bike is very popular right by my country people because they pursued a healthy lifestyle and loves to save energy and gas.

✓ Bikes are very popular among people in my country because they pursue a healthy lifestyle and love to save energy and gas.

Multiple errors: 'Bike' should be plural 'Bikes' to match general statement (singular/plural issue but primarily subject-verb agreement), so use 'Bikes are'. 'right by my country people' is incorrect preposition and word order; use 'among people in my country.' Verb tense/ agreement: 'pursued' is past tense but the statement describes a general habit, so use present simple 'pursue.' 'loves' disagrees with plural subject 'they'; use 'love.' Suggestion: use plural subject with present simple for general truths and correct prepositions ('among' and 'in my country').