Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本直接，但“a junior at my university”不如“a university junior”自然；“plus”连接略生硬，建议使用“at the same time”或“in addition”。“my master degree”应改为“a master’s degree”。另外，“studying at Yields”表达不够清楚，如果指备考雅思，应明确说“preparing for the IELTS at Yields”。

例: I’m currently a university junior, and I’m also preparing for the IELTS at Yields because I plan to apply for a master’s degree abroad.

提案: 回答包含地点、专业和理由，内容较完整，但“studying in Suzhou”可以更具体地说“studying at a university in Suzhou”。应减少“umm”“you know”等填充词，并使用更清晰的结构，例如先回答地点，再补充专业和教师特点。可以加入具体细节说明教师如何专业。

例: I study at a university in Suzhou, a beautiful city in eastern China. I’m majoring in hospitality management, and I particularly like my teachers because they have extensive industry experience and give us practical advice.

提案: 观点明确，也提供了课程和教师两个理由，但“the university ... is very strong in my subject”不够自然，建议说“has a strong reputation for my subject”。“they”指代不清，大学通常用“it”，教师则用“the teachers”。最后一句没有完成，影响连贯性；应给出一个完整、具体的课程例子，并避免重复“many many”。

例: Yes, definitely. My university has a strong reputation for hospitality management because the teachers are experienced and professional. In addition, the courses are well designed; for example, we take practical classes on hotel operations and event planning.

提案: 回答有明确立场，并解释了目前不想改变的原因，逻辑较清楚。不过“studying for exam exams”是明显重复，应改为“preparing for my exams”。“So”不应单独放在句末；可以用完整句子收尾，说明学校目前的环境已经足够支持你的计划。还可以简化第一句，使表达更自然。

例: At the moment, I wouldn’t like my university to make any major changes. I only have about six months to prepare my application to Switzerland, so I need to focus on collecting documents and preparing for my exams. The current environment is already suitable for my study plans.

提案: 回答直接表达了出国读硕士的计划，也提到体验不同文化这一具体原因。但“get my master degree”应改为“pursue a master’s degree”，“surpass”在这里用词错误，可能想表达“challenge myself”或“broaden my horizons”。建议减少填充词，并补充具体专业或学习目标，使内容更完整。

例: I plan to go abroad, probably to Switzerland, to pursue a master’s degree in hospitality management. I’d like to challenge myself academically and gain international experience. Living in a different country would also allow me to immerse myself in a new culture and broaden my horizons.

× Well currently I am a junior at my university plus I am studying at Yields to apply for my master degree.

✓ Well, currently I am a junior at my university, and I am studying at Yields to apply for my master's degree.

“degree”是可数名词，单数形式前需要冠词；同时表示“硕士学位”时，规范表达是“a master's degree”。这里使用“a”表示一个硕士学位，“master's”表示所属关系。

× For example, we have many many like.

✓ For example, we have many well-designed courses.

“many many like”不是完整的英语句子，缺少能够表达完整意思的名词和结构。“like”在这里不能单独放在句末。可以直接说“many well-designed courses”，意思是“许多设计良好的课程”。

× During this time I need to focus on gathering documents and studying for exam exams.

✓ During this time I need to focus on gathering documents and studying for exams.

“exam exams”重复且单复数使用不正确。这里谈论多个考试，使用复数“exams”即可；如果只谈一个考试，则应说“an exam”。

× During this time I need to focus on gathering documents and studying for exam exams.

✓ During this time I need to focus on gathering documents and studying for the exams.

如果特指申请过程中需要准备的那些考试，应使用定冠词“the”，表达“这些考试”。同时不能使用“exam exams”这种重复形式。

× Umm, I plan to go abroad, maybe to Switzerland to get my master degree.

✓ Umm, I plan to go abroad, maybe to Switzerland, to get my master's degree.

单数可数名词“degree”前需要冠词；“硕士学位”的固定表达是“a master's degree”或在特定语境下使用“my master's degree”。因为这里使用了物主限定词“my”，不再需要额外添加“a”。