Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、简洁并直接回应问题。避免语法错误与多余词汇，时态与冠词要注意。可以用一两句话交代身份与工作情况，并用连接词说明工作频率或原因。

例: I'm a student, but I also have a part-time job. I work occasionally when I have free time to earn extra money and gain experience.

提案: 回答应更连贯并注意句子结构与冠词、专有名词大小写。把信息分成主题句和支持细节，避免模糊词汇（如 “pro diploma of A management” 应明确专业名称）。

例: I study in Australia at HI University, where I'm enrolled in the Diploma in Project Management. The teachers are very good, and I enjoy studying here, so I plan to continue my course.

提案: 要使用正确的形容词与语法，句子要简洁并有逻辑连接。用具体例子说明为什么是好地方（如教学质量、学习氛围、设施）。避免口语化或错误词形。

例: Yes, it's an excellent place to study. The tutors are very helpful and the students are friendly, which creates a supportive learning environment. For example, classmates often form study groups to prepare for exams.

提案: 回答要更明确、有条理并减少填充词（如 "umm"）。提出改变时给出具体原因与建议位置或数量，使用更自然表达。

例: Overall it's a good campus, but I think it would help if they put more rubbish bins around the library and student center, as I sometimes struggle to find one.

提案: 回答应更自然并遵循逻辑顺序：先说计划，再说明理由或准备如何实现。注意语法（如动词时态、冠词）和重复表达。

例: I'm currently studying for a Diploma in Project Management, and I hope to pass all my exams so I can progress to the Advanced Diploma in Project Management next year. I want to continue here because the program and support are excellent.

× I'm a student but I have a part time job.

✓ I'm a student but I have a part-time job.

“part time” 作复合形容词修饰名词时应连字符为“part-time”，这是词形和拼写问题，便于表达清晰。

× I work sometimes when I have a free time.

✓ I work sometimes when I have free time.

在英语中不可数名词“time”前通常不用不定冠词“a”与“free”连用，应说“have free time”。此外，副词顺序更自然为“I sometimes work when I have free time.” 建议把“sometimes”放在动词前或句首。

× I study in Australia, my school name is HI University.

✓ I study in Australia. My school's name is HI University.

原句缺少所有格或系动词以连接名词短语。应使用所有格“school's name”或用“the name of my school is”。同时两个独立句应分号或句号分开。

× My major is pro diploma of A management.

✓ My major is a Professional Diploma in Project Management.

原句中大小写、冠词和名词形式、词序不正确。应使用不定冠词“a”，专业名称规范为“Professional Diploma in Project Management”。请注意专有名词和课程名称的正确拼写与大小写。

× My teacher is really good and I love here.

✓ My teachers are really good and I love it here.

如果指多个教师应使用复数“teachers”。“love here”表达不完整，需加代词“it”表示对地点的喜爱。

× I will continue study here.

✓ I will continue studying here.

在“continue”之后应接动词的-ing形式，故用“continue studying”。

× Yes, it is a excellent place to study.

✓ Yes, it is an excellent place to study.

“excellent”以元音音素开头，前面不定冠词应为“an”而不是“a”。

× My tutors are very kindness, they help me a lot.

✓ My tutors are very kind; they help me a lot.

“kindness”是名词，应使用形容词“kind”来修饰“tutors”。两个独立分句间应使用分号或句号。

× The schoolmates very kindness and passion they help me a lot as well.

✓ The schoolmates are very kind and enthusiastic; they help me a lot as well.

需在主语与表语之间加系动词“are”。“kindness”改为形容词“kind”；“passion”作形容词应为“passionate”或更自然“enthusiastic”。句子也需断句以提高可读性。

× I super love here to study ever.

✓ I really love studying here.

原句结构混乱，“super”与“ever”使用不当，且“love here to study”语序不自然。改为“I really love studying here.”更简洁自然。

× In my opinion my studies place is a good place but just the one thing it's umm better if they do put some more rubbish bin in different place.

✓ In my opinion my study place is good, but one thing: it would be better if they put more rubbish bins in different places.

原句中“studies place”应为“study place”或“campus”；“just the one thing”位置不自然；“it's umm better if they do put”冗长且不符合正式表达，改为“it would be better if they put”。名词“rubbish bin”需用复数“rubbish bins”，并且“in different places”比“in different place”更合适。

× Sometimes I find the rubbish bin.

✓ Sometimes I can't find a rubbish bin.

原句含义不明确，根据上下文应为“有时我找不到垃圾桶”，需加入否定和不定冠词以表达“找不到某个垃圾桶”的意思。

× My major is Diploma of A Project Management and I hope I would pass all the exams and enter smoothly my next course that is Advanced Diploma of a Project Management.

✓ My major is a Diploma of Project Management and I hope I will pass all the exams and smoothly enter my next course, which is the Advanced Diploma of Project Management.

课程名称前需加不定冠词“a”。“I hope I would”时态不恰当，改为“I hope I will”更合适。词序“enter smoothly my next course”应为“smoothly enter my next course”。“that is”可用关系从句“which is”或逗号后接解释。

× I desire studying more here, I love here.

✓ I want to study more here; I love it here.

“desire studying”不常用，改为更自然的动词短语“want to study”。第二分句需加代词“it”表示对地点的喜爱，并用分号或句号分开句子。