Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap kısa ve doğrudan fakat daha doğal ve genişletilmiş bir konu cümlesi ile geliştirilebilir. Bir iki cümle daha ekleyerek hangi düzeyde okuduğunuzu veya bölümünüzü söyleyebilirsiniz. Bağlaç kullanımı gerekmiyorsa gereksiz uzatmalardan kaçının; 1-2 destekleyici detay yeterli.

例: I am a student, currently studying at high school. I’m in the final year and focusing on university entrance preparations.

提案: Bilgi doğru fakat sözdizimi ve akıcılık geliştirilmeli. Şehir ve okul adını daha doğal bir sırayla ve tam cümle yapısıyla söyleyin. Kısaltmalardan veya eksik artikellerden kaçının ve gerekirse kısa bir ek bilgi verin.

例: I study in Istanbul, Turkey. I attend Robert College, which is one of the oldest and most well-known schools in the city.

提案: Cevap fikir veriyor ancak dilbilgisi, kelime seçimi ve düzenleme zayıf. 'Adventures' yerine 'opportunities' veya 'activities' daha uygun. Birkaç kısa cümle ile destekleyin ve bağlaç kullanarak akışı düzenleyin. Ayrıca gramer hataları (free foods → free meals; you can social with → you can socialise with others) düzeltilmeli.

例: Yes, it’s a great place to study because there are many extracurricular activities and opportunities. For example, students can live in dorms and enjoy free meals, which makes it easy to socialise and participate in events.

提案: Cevap anlaşılır ama dilbilgisi ve mantık akışı sorunlu. 'If I will change' yanlış; 'If I could change something' veya 'I would change' kullanın. "more less complicated" çelişkili; 'less complicated' yeterli. Sebep ve örnek vererek destekleyin.

例: I like my school, but if I could change one thing it would be the curriculum because many students find the lessons too difficult. For instance, some subjects could be taught more gradually with extra support sessions.

提案: Niyet net fakat ifadeler belirsiz ve dilbilgisi hatalı. 'Take my feedbacks well' ve 'study what I read' ifadeleri düzeltilmeli. Daha spesifik hedefler ve nedenler ekleyin, ayrıca bağlaç kullanarak mantığı güçlendirin.

例: I would like to study in the United States at a reputable university because I can receive better feedback and guidance. I hope to follow a programme that closely matches my interests so I can specialise in the subjects I enjoy.

× 'I study in Turkey, city of Istanbul and my school name is Robert College.'

✓ 'I study in Istanbul, Turkey, and my school's name is Robert College.'

'Preposition and word order: say "in Istanbul, Turkey" not "in Turkey, city of Istanbul". Also use the possessive form for school name: "my school's name is...". Suggestion: place the city before the country and use the possessive or "the name of my school is...'. '

× 'Well, I think it's a good place to study because there are many adventures for students.'

✓ 'Well, I think it's a good place to study because there are many activities for students.'

'Word choice: "adventures" is unnatural in this context; "activities" or "opportunities" is more appropriate when talking about school programs. Suggestion: use context-appropriate nouns.' '

× 'You can stay in the school like a dorm and you have free foods you can social with'

✓ 'You can stay at the school in a dorm, and you have free food and chances to socialize.'

'Articles and countability: use "at the school" and "in a dorm". "Food" is uncountable so not "foods". "Social with" is incorrect; use "socialize" or "opportunities to socialize". Suggestion: use correct prepositions, uncountable nouns, and verbs.' '

× 'I like my place that I study but if I will change something I think it will be the lessons because lessons are very hard for most of the students and just we can have more less complicated lessons.'

✓ 'I like the place where I study, but if I could change something, I would change the lessons because they are very hard for most students and we could have less complicated lessons.'

'Conditional and future: English does not use "if I will" in the if-clause. Use the second conditional for unreal or hypothetical changes: "If I could change... I would change..." Also: use "the place where I study" and plural agreement and word order: "less complicated lessons". Suggestion: use correct conditional forms and natural word order.' '

× 'I would like to study in America and I want a good school that I can take my feedbacks well and I want to study what I read.'

✓ 'I would like to study in the United States, and I want a good school where I can receive constructive feedback and study what I am interested in.'

'Word choice and modal/relative clause: use "where" not "that" for schools with verbs. "Take my feedbacks well" is incorrect; use "receive constructive feedback". "America" formal: "the United States". "Study what I read" is unclear; replace with "study what I am interested in." Suggestion: use appropriate relative pronouns and standard collocations for feedback and interests.' '