Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “At the moment I am not working or studying.”), avoid filler words (“uh”, repeated “I”), correct vocabulary (“working”, “student”, “massage skills”), and give one short reason or plan. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: At the moment I am not working or formally studying. I am preparing to study remedial massage in Australia because I want to improve my massage skills.

提案: Provide a clear, grammatical statement about where and when you studied. Use linking words to explain purpose and frequency. Avoid unfinished sentences and repetition.

例: About six months ago I studied at a physiotherapy school to improve my English. I practiced English every day there, which helped me gain confidence in speaking.

提案: Answer directly and coherently. Begin with a clear opinion (Yes/No) and support it with specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid fillers and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, it is a good place for me to study because my home is quiet, so I can concentrate better on my tasks. As a result, I can study English every day without distractions.

提案: Give a direct answer with one clear reason. Avoid contradictory phrases and repetition. Use one concise sentence to say you want no changes and state why.

例: No, I would not like any changes because I am satisfied with my house; it is comfortable and quiet for studying.

提案: State your plan clearly and use correct grammar and conditional form. Use one sentence for the plan and one for the condition or motivation, avoiding repetition. Correct vocabulary: “remedial massage”, “IELTS score”, and consistent tense.

例: I plan to study remedial massage in Australia to improve my skills. If I achieve a good IELTS score, I will apply to a training program there.

× At the moment I'm not uh, walking or, or I'm not student because I would like to study in Australia to learn massage skill.

✓ At the moment I'm not working or a student because I would like to study in Australia to learn massage skills.

The student used 'walking' instead of 'working' and omitted the article before 'student' and used singular 'skill'. Use present continuous 'I'm not working' for current activity, include the article 'a student', and pluralize 'skills' because 'massage skills' is standard. Suggestion: Use 'working' for employment and remember to use articles with singular countable nouns and pluralize when referring to abilities.

× As six months ago, I studied in physi to, uh, learn English.

✓ Six months ago, I studied physiotherapy to learn English.

The phrase 'As six months ago' is incorrect; use 'Six months ago'. 'Physi' is incomplete; 'physiotherapy' likely intended. This is a past time reference so simple past 'I studied' is correct. Remove filler words and unnecessary commas. Suggestion: Start time phrases directly ('Six months ago') and use full noun forms.

× Umm, so I, I had the I had studied every day English every day.

✓ I studied English every day.

The student incorrectly used past perfect 'I had studied' redundantly and repeated words. For a simple past habit at a specific past time, use simple past 'I studied'. Remove repetitions and unnecessary 'had'. Suggestion: Use simple past for repeated past actions and avoid redundant words.

× So this experience is.

✓ So that was my experience.

The fragment 'So this experience is.' lacks a complete verb phrase and appropriate tense. Referring to a past period, use 'that was my experience' or 'this was my experience'. Suggestion: Ensure sentences have a subject and a verb and match tense to context.

× I studied English every day at home, uh, because, umm, my home is uh, quiet.

✓ I studied English every day at home because my house was quiet.

The student mixes past ('studied') with present 'my home is quiet'. When describing the situation during that past study period, use past 'was quiet'. Also 'house' is more natural than repeating 'home' here. Suggestion: Keep time references consistent; if action is past, describe circumstances in past tense.

× So I can concentrate my TA, I can concentrate better on my tasks, uh, or studies.

✓ So I could concentrate better on my tasks or studies.

The phrase 'concentrate my TA' is incorrect and unclear. Also, since describing past ability, use past modal 'could' instead of 'can'. Remove 'my TA'. Suggestion: Use 'could concentrate' for past ability and clearly state the object (tasks or studies).

× It's very.

✓ It was very peaceful.

'It's very.' is an incomplete sentence. A complete description is needed; given context, 'very peaceful' or 'very quiet' fits and should be past tense 'was'. Suggestion: Complete the adjective and match tense.

× No, I want to I want to change, I want to remain, I want to change anything where I where I study because I I'm satisfied with my house.

✓ No, I do not want to change anything about where I study because I'm satisfied with my house.

The student repeats and contradicts 'want to change' and 'want to remain'. Use 'do not want to change anything about where I study' to express satisfaction. 'Because I I'm' has duplication. Use 'I'm' once. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and state negatives clearly with 'do not' and use concise phrasing.

× I would like to study in Australia to learn remedial massage.

✓ I would like to study in Australia to learn remedial massage.

This sentence is acceptable. 'Would like to' correctly expresses future desire. No correction needed. Suggestion: None.

× I like improving my massage skills so if I if I get a good irate score I studied abroad.

✓ I like improving my massage skills, so if I get a good IELTS score, I will study abroad.

Multiple issues: 'irate' is incorrect; likely 'IELTS'. 'If I get' should be followed by future 'I will study abroad' for a real future condition. 'I studied abroad' is past and does not match the condition. Also add comma after 'skills' and 'so'. Suggestion: Use correct test name 'IELTS', use first conditional 'If I get ... I will...', and keep tenses consistent for conditional sentences.